Bed Traveler

Bed Traveler

Restless legs in night canter

 Yards, rods, furlongs, miles

Before exhaustion turns down the bedcovers

And sleep, death's little sister

Tucks me in.

A swimming slumber under linen

Searching for,

 Finding

The cool side

You so thoughtfully

Left for me.

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

And here you were giving me a hard time on my last poem and you so poetically capitalized the first letter in every line regardless of punctuation. That's what true poets do, (according to my old high school teacher). Hey, be thankful for that cold side, my wife is constantly elbowing me. I'm thinking of going full on Dick Van Dyke and getting separate beds. What do you think? BTW, I like that line about sleep being deaths little sister. CD

[Delmar Cooper]

Glad you read it. The beauty of "poetry" is you can write any damn thing, give it unconventional punctuation, or none at all, and baptize it poetry.
Gotta love something so forgiving. I don't consider my "poetry" to be anything other than the fetuses of short stories.

[Mark]

this speaks to me... not to presume your meaning, but I relate to the reading.. searching for sleep... restless mind, planning, reviewing, planning, running miles, sleep (sometimes) comes... peaceful oblivion.. till muscle memory wakens, just seconds before reality...

I love your wording, there is no bitterness, thoughtful and cheeky, thank you for sharing

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this writing. They are important to me. I am glad you saw no "writer's agenda." If any writing of mine is ever successful the success lies in the reader.

[Mark]

I agree, otherwise our poetry would still be in that little book beside our beds:)

[AprilRN1210]

My head was "seeing" and thinking one thing halfway through this then it took a turn towards the end.. which left a lot of questions unanswered.. I love your phrasing throughout, it teases the senses through imagery just enough, but then takes you somewhere else.. the flow had me hanging on each line anticipating exactly where you would take me to next... This is the first piece of yours I have read, and I have to say, I really enjoyed..

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for your review and your gracious remarks. I am glad that you, in particular, enjoyed it. You're kinda famous around here.

[AprilRN1210]

making me giggle and blush.. me?.. famous??.. ummmm, not so sure about that.. really?.. well, thank you... I am flattered.. honestly.. It was my pleasure..

[Cory Barrett]

i find this to be an outstanding snapshot of crawling into bed. Really there is something about this that keeps drawing me back in. I like the connection at the ending with another person, but its not about the other person. Our struggle to give into what i coming for us, only to get there with the help of another.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading and commenting on this little poem-like offering. Small things loom large in my microcosmos.

[Michael G. Smith]

"Sleep; death's little sister" brilliant line.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for the kind accolade.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i relate to this differently...i see the other side of the bed occupied...but for me it is that restless leg thing...and sometimes i have to be so overcome with tiredness in order to finally calm down.

but this could also be how we sometimes travel so far in our dreams...into another world, and then when we return, we awaken on our side of the bed...the one that was saved for us by our mate as we return to reality...

[Delmar Cooper]

bananas great source of potassium potassium is good for restless legs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and for restless heart syndrome?

[Delmar Cooper]

take two Sonnets and call me in the morning

[jacob erin-cilberto]

okay, Doc...thanks. :)))

[Delmar Cooper]

Hard not to be a little flippant addressing big questions. Travel is a cure for restlesness but travels tires the traveler, so where do we end up? Ah well.

[Lyn Anderson]

The ending of this is perfect, as previously stated by the lovely Frieda. I love the description, as I am afflicted with sleepwalking and talking, and night terrors, I relate well.

[Frieda P]

I love the bittersweet ending, long day ending in emptiness, the imagery is perfect...