All Upon a River Shore

All Upon a River Shore

A Poem by Delmar Cooper

White birds like bleached crows

Ride cow backs in this place

Visible from the river

Wild turkeys in single school boy file

Amble in the gravel, the gravel beach

On the slow side of the water

Iridescent reptiles bask in river sun

Women, golden skinned, smiles like moon sliver

Watch and bathe in glassy gliding water

“How may I reach this spot,

What road, which highway, which turning?

And I look at him and weep

Only from the river

Only from the river

Can these places be found.


© 2015 Delmar Cooper



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when John Lee Hooker yelled "Boom, boom, boom, boom" you never once thought of anything but the
Mississippi Delta. The reason being, why would a person born in the city say a thing such as that.
You may as well have written Trussville, Alabama in distemper where the landscape and the
rivers edge prepares it's own ground for painting. And any poem titled "All Upon a River Shore"
is an invitation to something extremely careful and water fed.

Here you show your tremendous skill as a poet. Not short or long, not far off or spatial,
just the many relationships of 'right now'//well done...dana

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

With the exception of a single word uttered to me forty years ago this is perhaps the nicest thing a.. read more



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The 'river' is a great concept. And I love your idea of actually being in the river to see these wondrous things. I think the line 'And I look at him and weep' might mean that the poet knows that if he goes into the river, he might not come back. The metaphor of having to enter the river, reminds me of the phrase 'the grass is greener on the other side'. This is a very thought-provoking poem, beautifully written, and I shall spend some time today pondering on it.


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Out of reach. Segregation came to mind when reading this poem. I felt it and understood the weeping. Strong imagery and emotion coming through. Thank you.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

2 Months Ago

"Out of reach. Segregation came to mind when reading this poem"
Thanks for your thoughtful .. read more
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Les
Delmar,

currently in the UK we are coming to a spell of weather that has blown in straight from Siberia. But I could almost feel the sun on my back as I read this. Such a tonic. Good job!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading Les. I visited London with my family one March. We all bought new coats on t.. read more
This is good as well, with that nice 'cri de coeur' taking it to another level at the end.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Your wordscape was a true delight

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

5 Months Ago

Thanks for your kind words.
Cherrie Palmer

5 Months Ago

I love life on the river. It is its own brand of beauty.
Delmar Cooper

5 Months Ago

I once worked on a river and I would tell friends about something I'd seen.
When they asked.. read more
WOW! I love the originality of your piece! I started out thinking we were on a river in Africa, but then things got a little muddled along the way, & finally I figured it could be any river anywhere! It's just a novel idea to take us on a little spin to see the various creatures, trying to guess where this is . . . and I agree, rivers attract life & gatherings! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the hug, I was completely out of hugs.
I read several of your pieces before settling on this one, I think mainly because the picture you paint is one that is familiar to me. Although you may have and one river in mind, there are hundreds of such rivers in the south. The line "And I look at him and weep" jumps out at me, mainly because it almost feels out of place, or the weeping is a bit strong for the first emotion actually entered in response to such an innocuous question. It actually disturbed me enough that I stopped and reread several times, and although the purpose seems to be to instill a sense of deep longing, I think that you do it without the need for this line. I like it much better when I deleted it from the poem entirely as I read. The repetition of the next line says it all for you. Still it is a beautiful poem with carefully crafted images. ~jan

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

Yeah, "weep" is pretty wimpy. Perhaps if the narrator felt scorn for the question rather than pity,.. read more
JayceeC

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I try to give helpful advice. the kind I would want to receive on my own work. Weep is j.. read more
I made the mistake of reading a few reviews and end up with nothing to add except love it. great description and flow. stunning word choice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your kind words Woody. Many thanks.
This reminded me of a river I live nearby, almost perfectly.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Delmar Cooper

3 Years Ago

Something kinda wonderful about water and when you get it all going in one direction like a river, w.. read more

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Trussville, AL



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