Two poems

haiku two maybe

With Apology to…Basho

 

On Destiny

 

Pine straw in her beak

Motherbird,  nest weaver, works

Patient cat awaits

 

 

Another Opinion of Spring

 

Cold snow has fallen,

White over mantles the green.

Youth?  But a memory.

Reviews

[Ana Papaya]

My daughter and I wrote a few haiku poems this evening. about spring.
I'll have to show her yours and see what she thinks :)

It seems the common thread between the two is the pending doom.
The clutches of the cat, the clutches of old age. A looming threat.

And then of course we have the birth in the one, new life and the aging of the other, life leaving.
Is that what they call juxtaposition when you have to extremes presented by side?

I guess the conclusion I am drawing is that I like them both and can interpret their meanings in different ways.

And silly me, I had to google Basho and I am so happy I am walking away with a bonus nugget from your writing. Enjoyed. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

Beautiful review. The beautiful part is the part about you and your daughter writing together. That is what you call juxtaposition, or should, at least I do.

[Ana Papaya]

ok. I got it right. :)
and thank you. she likes writing 'hikoos' :)
nice to read your clever words Delmar

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

"Cold snow" good to remember it's cold to the reader. I like.

[T.S. Ulmus]

Basho would be proud of these elegant haikus, you have honored the art form. Actually, they both very much read like his. Elusive meaning and cause for thought, a whole that is greater than the sum of its parts. Basho himself would uncap your pen and hand it to you.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Nice to meet you, Delmar! I have three cats, so I'm quite partial to the first one, but I immensely enjoyed them both. Haiku's and Senryu's are a wonderful form of expression. Much enjoyed!

[Delmar Cooper]

Only three cats? Don't they get lonely? My lodgings are cat free now but for 12 years we had four that were always present. Thanks for your comment.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Four was the most I had at one time. I've never been without a cat or dog in my life, ever since I was a child. Wouldn't want to live in a house without one!

[Chris]

I came back
...the coffee wisps called.
I remember'd ...now.

[Dave]

Neat! I sure hope the cat misses out on its' prey.
I appreciate the metaphor or the green with youth - very clever.
Thank you for the beauty of your wriing.

Take care - Dave

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for reading. It is difficult for mere humans to say which is more important, a deficiency of birds or a better fed cat. My sympathies naturally go to the birds, but I build bird houses and cats secure independent lodging.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is Simple but really sophisticated in its simplicity.
And it's really a wonderful thought, Delmar
I like it.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks so much for reading and your generous comment

[free will]

Beeeeeeutiful ..."youth? but a memory."

[Delmar Cooper]

When memory is still working that is.

[Cory Barrett]

On destiny indeed! our works look on with licking chops!

[CD Campbell]

All good work and intentions can be destroyed by a patient narcissist.

I am old and close to death.

Ok. My interpretations are not as eloquent as your scribbles, but I feel it is my duty to make light of your work in the vain hope that it will bring a smile to your grouchy face. You're welcome.

[Delmar Cooper]

Despite what you read, I am the most un-curmudgeonly person I know. In real life, that is. I only play an a*****e online. Just to fit in, you know. Good to see a fellow traveler again.

[angel]

These are good, Cooper. Being of a certain age, I was especially moved by the second one.
Seems as though I revisit the memories of the past more and more often now.

[Delmar Cooper]

“Of certain age”, and how are things on the ice floe? Bracing? Thanks for the comment.

[angel]

Damn thing gets smaller every day; soon I will be balancing on an ice cube...

[angel]

ungrateful kids...blub...blub...oh crap....