The Air In Which We Breathe

The Air In Which We Breathe

A Poem by Summer D.
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Response Haiku.

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The Air In Which We Breathe

Simply; to free us.
We need only lift our heads.
Drink; the air we breathe.



© 2012 Summer D.



Author's Note

Summer D.
Air... Freedom...
Sea.. Net... Restricted...

It was a good haiku.
I couldn't help but challenge.
Just a minute to think and write..

Inspiration: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Tai-Ryans/985804/

YT,

Summer

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I love haiku's so short yet meaningful, and yours is breath-taking.

Posted 4 Years Ago


You explained life in the best way! 100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


wow. Breath taking haiku. Your words flow together so wonderfully and create an atmosphere of peace and hope. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Keep it up!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I think Maslow neglected to mention that air is pretty high up in the hierarchy of needs. In my opinion, the only need greater than air is information – for without DNA what would there be that needs to breathe? So, on that note, we must appreciate all good poetry as information. Or, as Valentine Michael Smith would assert, “to grok” is to drink and to drink is to understand (or to intimately and completely share the same reality or line of thinking with another physical or conceptual entity. – Heinlein, Stranger in a Strange Land). Of course Smith interprets grok from an arid point of view where water is sacred. This poem takes Smith’s antipode; we are inundated (by water) and to surface is to breathe –-is to drink –-is to grok -- is to…. Uh, well , of course you got the idea :). Nice poem!

Posted 5 Years Ago


This poem is so beautiful. It is so inspiring and is so sweet, simple and delicate. I LOVE IT! Straight to my library!

Perfect!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I very much agree, air is a genius term for freedom.

Posted 5 Years Ago


"Drink; the air we breathe." though its a simple line..i like this part of the haiku..for me most of the last lines in chapters, haikus, and poems are my favorite..i dunno why..GOOD JOB! this felt so light and delicate. Bravo!

Posted 5 Years Ago


You've written an incredible response to the haiku that I have written. Like Lina Grey below says; they display separate ideas, but when combined, it creates such a beautiful piece. Well done ~

Posted 5 Years Ago


Both "The Air In Which We Breathe" and "The Seas" are excellent poems. Individually they display separate, intriguing ideas.
Together, however, they creat a more whole image on life. The stark contrast between the two make them more complimentary and unified.
Brilliant pieces. Thank you.

Posted 5 Years Ago


As a stand alone, I think this is a good poem, I prefer it coupled with Tai's original poem; it gives it a more unison and yin-yang sense. Very nice concept.

Posted 5 Years Ago



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