Want to Kill

Fresh blood in the water,

fragrance aromatic, for I never sought her.

Oxygen defamates and imitates,

Oxymoronic contradiction irritates.

 

So I want to kill,

the saints and sinners and end the world,

Stop the thrill,

of the judge and jury trapped inside their cherry swirl...

 

Reak of rot,

the lives lost, the truth remains,

that this heart retains.

Never needed air to live,

never needed love to give...

 

So I want to kill,

the saints and sinners and end the world.

Stop the thrill,

of the judge and jury trapped in their cherry swirl.

So I want to kill,

the glistening tragedies sustained by insanity,

and burn these flowers of blossoming vanity.

I want to kill,

Stop the thrill,

I want to kill,

myself.

 

So I seclude myself from the malevolent irregularities,

oxymoronic self indulgences, the tragedies and parodies,

of a crumbling world turned sour,

I seperate myself from life, this withering flower.

 

Reak of rot,

the lives lost, the truth remains,

that this heart retains.

 

So I want to kill,

the saints and sinners and end the world.

Stop the thrill,

of the judge and jury trapped in their cherry swirl.

So I want to kill,

the glistening tragedies sustained by insanity,

and burn these flowers of blossoming vanity.

I want to kill,

Stop the thrill,

I want to kill,

myself.

Reviews

[Jake Donald Stephens]

Awesome poem.
"Reak of rot"--do you mean "reek"? I looked up "reak" in the dictionary, and the definition doesn't seem to fit. But I could be wrong.

[Morgan Ashire]

Your vocabulary is immaculate. I am impressed by its range. I do have a few notes though. Saints and Sinners? Marilyn Manson. Busted. Also, you used a lot of unneeded punctuation in spots and you missed needed punctuation in other spots. The piece was good, but its sectioning I think could use a bit of reworking, or even a bit of rewording. I love the nuance of the piece and I like how you manifested the choppiness of the words to play into the piece. That was most artfully done in my opinion.

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This is good. I could feel the depth you have in it. I am impressed by the power of your words. A good poem!