Please come back

I'll wait for you to comeback

I woke up with tears in my eyes
recalling what happened last night
I feel so cold as if I were inside the ice
And I realized you were not by my side

I called out your name again and again
you didn’t response and pierce my heart with pain
Like a thick wood, brick, metal or a stone

It hit me so hard that you were already gone

 

I just sat right in front of my door
hoping that you’ll come back and hold me more
Together forever, I’m just dreaming
Now my worst fear came, you left me

Reviews

[Sunny Hostess]

It's greaaat!

[Michael Mwachofi]

It's always admirable to me writing about what your feeling...it's like some sort of release and poetic therapy if you ask me.

Pain is always hard and humans cannot quantify it but through this piece i guess you could've come close...You poured your heart into the words and i respect that :D

Though the grammar could use a tiny abit of polishing but worry not keep writing!

Good one :)

~M.Babu~

[Michael West]

A very beautiful piece, a pleasure to read!!

[Boldpen]

Wow!! It was really touching.
A whole story of pain due to separation from a loved on presented in such a beautiful manner. Really fantastic.
Words were very finely chosen and emotional impact made it even more grasping.
Nice job.

[Dezzyray]

very beautiful piece.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Some emotions are just so hard to let go of...

[kathrina]

Beautiful poem. I love the emotions. :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love it !!! often is the case...yearning still after awhile...all the past events, memories...and what ifs etc...

Top write xD

[Thrinna Mae]

Aw...BH... XD
Nice poem...Very emotional...
Keep it up... :)))

[Lily Mae]

I hope your heart has healed.. This is heartbreaking and emotional and you penned those feelings well. There's no worse feeling then to feel the wood, brick, metal or stone.. Well done..xx