Baby Owl

Stout, chubby, fat
A baby owl sat

on the long black cable

to fly it seemed unable

Down below is cat

Good he's hidden by a mat

Last night it must have lost its way

The sun is blinding, it must stay

Mama bird will find you at night

In my garden you will be alright

Baby owl your feather like hay

I'll take care of you till you fly away 

- Dinali Sathma

Author's Note

An innocent thought of a child watching a bird.

Reviews

[PurpleQuartz]

Awwwww...that was so sweet and beautifully written.

[Dinali Sathma]

ThankYou

[ms. barrie]

this is so endearing, and squishy. i love owls myself. i love the word choice you used and the pleasant rhyme, and the sweetness you weaved through out this poem. great job!

[Dinali Sathma]

ThankYou

[Leslie Philibert]

You have a lot of talent ! And you are so young ! Fine job.

[Dinali Sathma]

Thank You :)

[Phillitup]

This is a cute but sad poem. It's sense of hurt while the child watches it. The child is showing the bird sweet protection. I loved this poem...nicely penned.
Best regards,
Dell

[Dinali Sathma]

Thankyou.. the child and owl are symbols of innocence

[Icelanna]

This poem clearly consists of rhyming couplets. Very good rhyming scheme, AABB CCDD and so on. To make it more detailed I would add a full stop after each couplet to give it a more definite structure instead of it being one big flow. Also after the first line of the couplet sometimes a caesura would be appropriate to halt bits and give pauses, including one on the last two lines such as "...like hay, NEXT LINE." Include the full stop. I would also add an "A" in where you say down below is cat, should be down below is A cat.
Other than that I think it's very sweet.
Very well done.
Love to you x

[Dinali Sathma]

I just don't have enough of knowledge on punctuating so thanks for the advice. And I did consider writing A cat but thought that cat would sound better. Like the name of the cat is Cat in that case maybe I should capitalized "C"
Thank you for the review ^_^

[Icelanna]

Yeah capitalize it if it's the name, if not the A needs to be there :] Your most welcome, any time x
Love to you x

[Marie]

This is rather sweet. I'm glad the bby owl is being taken care of.

[Dinali Sathma]

Thankyou and yes, now its safely back in its home.

[Apatheia]

Aww. I love owls so much. They're so cute. This poem is really adorable. :) Thank you so much for sharing.

[Dinali Sathma]

I love them too :). Thankyou