Plastic Eyelashes

Abandoned trees with uncut grass,

A man had lived there, a man so crass.

His wife bore two daughters, one dead at birth, blackening the days.

Committed she stayed, hoping to dissipate her husband's lackadaisical ways. 

 

Then one winter came, where the wife lay in bed and moaned. 

"Tis' a burden you are, love"; In response the man groaned. 

"You're too boring in bed, and your breasts sag far too much." 

"I could've married that man, you know, the handsome one, the Dutch." 

A menace, he became.

Yet, he payed the bills, and thus he reigned. 

"What a liar father is." 

"You should've never married that man! My husband can do better, far better than your Joe can!"

Such taunts, such negativity, drove her to such sure instability. 

One day in August, a Saturday at noon, 

Her husband was out, repairing her beloved china spoon.

She sat at the cracked mirror, underneath an incandescent light.

She had been here yesterday, cried herself all through the night.

And with delicacy she began to pluck her eyelashes out, 

One.

         Two.

Each bereft of a shout. 

"I'm beautiful now," She preened as she rose,

Yet disregarded the tear that trailed down her nose. 

Author's Note

Try not to make too much fun of the picture; I tried to be creative by posing pretty awkwardly but at least by having it relate to the poem. I hope you find it at least in the minimum, decent.

Reviews

[TheSweet]

This is a pretty interesting read. I've always loved story-based poems - and this works. The only issue is that some of the bits of information feel like they've only been put in to rhyme, which jars the story. I dunno if it's just me that noticed this, but it's probably not worth re-writing for. *shrug* something to think about in future?

I do really like it though, thanks for sharing :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

i think the picture is very creative i love it it looks awesome.
The rhyming was amazing and the story line was different and pretty darn awesome :)
i really loved this your very talented

[Distantview]

The seedy side of life, in all its fascinating and strange detail! An inventive and interesting write. Creative photo also!

[L.Edward]

Reading this one made me feel like I was peering into the window of a house. All these different lives like different rooms in the tiny house. What a fascinating knack for characterisation you have.

[Neville]

There is something just that little bit different & therefore special about this. I like it and your creativity obviously extends beyond words but other art forms too. all Good things, Neville

[Sami Khalil]

You are proving by the day that you are the creative and the blooming rose...Well done...:)

[SyberRose]

Very creative in both poetry and picture...true to life images of a bored married couple...Rose