Scene of flames

Always check for injuries before moving.

who are you to say that whatever doesn't kill a person makes them stronger. maybe they just barely made it, you seeing them walk out of the fire after a mere coincidence. it looks heroic to you, a scene of flames like in the movies, but you don't know whether a person has indeed gotten stronger. for all you know they've been getting weaker all this time.

Author's Note

What did you feel?
What noticeable effect did the lowercase have on you as a reader, if any?
Do you think a narrower paragraph will make the poem feel less short?
Do you think the poem isn't long enough regardless?

Originally from my FB page, Nook Of Ruth.

Reviews

[Lara Vee]

I really felt the message.
But I'm think maybe the lack of grammar/format distracted from the feeling. I think you could use structure to really drive your intended effect.

[DiskartetHaraya]

Thank you. I will consider it. Let me know if you have any suggestions for a line break.