Confusion

Confusion

A Poem by Jordan Smith

Controlled by mixed emotions
Only to realize that you're not sure what you really want
Neglecting is your Brain
Feeling is your Heart
Unfortunately, you can't figure out which is right
Saddened by this, you
Isolate yourself
Only to realize your mistake of
Neglecting with your heart and feeling with your brain

© 2015 Jordan Smith


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Jordan Smith
Please comment below on what you think about this one. I really appreciate the feedback.

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the ending of this is very clever. amazing poetry here

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

5 Years Ago

Thank you Maddi! I really appreciate the critique. Also, thank you for choosing me as the winner of .. read more
You have confusion figured out. You give us a gem, identifiable with everyone who has ever had mixed emotions. The exposition is poignant and context are brief but poignant. Favorite line"Saddened by this, you isolate yourself..." keep it up.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

5 Years Ago

Thank you bigfootprint! I really do appreciate the review!
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The only thing that can help in between confusion of heart and brain is to get skilled at the usage of these....but that also costs penalty of betrayal and success to define who's right at which time...brain or heart!
Twax amazing read!☺

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the last line and how it brought in the other lines in the poem. I think often people are unsure of what they want and when they make the decision it is too late.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this, especially the last line :) good work :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The heart supplies the brain with oxygen and a rhythm...what does the brain do, wander off...we are all confused thats why I flip a coin. nice poem Jordan

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

We really cannot stand the bickering of our heart and mind.

I think you should change "your" to "you're" in the line "Only to realize that your not sure what you really want"

Keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pretty good. I liked the ending. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You summed up perfectly how confusion is internal conflict.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the yoda-esque nature of the feelings. Makes it unique and memorable. I really liked this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Jordan Smith
Jordan Smith

Houston, TX



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"All our dreams come true if we have the courage to pursue them" -Walt Disney I am an aspiring sports play by play broadcaster who writes poetry on the side. Trying to get back into it after a long.. more..

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