Impromptu

But if the world
No longer spin
Turn on the light
You have within
And I swear
No flowers will die
And as your friend
Neither will I.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

A true friend will always be there! Well written! Strong message and good flow. Would be tuned to perfection were it not for a small grammar error in the first two lines: "if" would elicit an "-s" in "spin".... "should" would leave it as is. Well done!

[Jessica Lima]

Thank You. Constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. :) Can't wait to read something from you also.

[Scerina Elizabeth]

This is so beautiful and so true...
Loved it :)

[Jessica Lima]

Thank You! I'll finishing reading your book soon!!!

[Scerina Elizabeth]

aww take ur time hun and your very welcome :)

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Long live poetry and rhyme! I love both and certainly can see that you do, too. I can only dream of how the world would be if we would all "turn on the light!" Sending a big smile your way, Sharon

[Jessica Lima]

Yes rhyme is indeed my secret lover. :) thank you for stopping by and leaving a review.

[Mr.Writer]

Woah! So eerie and cool.
Great poem!
I feel the hope and positivity of turning on the lights to shine life and having a friend that won't leave u

[Jessica Lima]

Too much negativity out there as is! we gotta spread happiness yeah?

[Mr.Writer]

Yep we gotta :)