Anonymity

Observations on solitude.

Anonymity

 

Sitting alone in my room

The same as in public places

Seen but not seen

Hidden among faces

Heard but not heard

Invisible, without traces

 

Anonymity

 

Words spoken to others

While I stand and watch

Smiling friendly bothers

Brief hellos, passing along

Silence in noise smothers

 

Anonymity

 

Passed over again

Sitting alone, full room

Nothing to say, nothing heard

Choices made in the gloom

Exits spied, paths taken

Crying out internally, this doom

 

Anonymity

 

Waiting for the moment

Recognition wanes

Brilliance of opinion given

Words of rebuff pains

The moment passes

Nothing there, no gains

 

Anonymity

 

Confusing what popularity is

Tripe passing as art

Dicta ad nauseam

Attempting my part

Spoken words given

Corpses upon a bubonic cart

 

Anonymity

 

Parity has no point

Silent words still spoken

Deaf ears to a crying world

System confidence broken

Expectations lowered

Efforts at excellence token

 

Anonymity

 

Better to hide in plain sight

Than to be heard saying nothing

A prophet wailing at a hurricane

Silenced in the roar, nothing

Desire to do, to be, to say

Words to no effect, nothing

 

Anonymity

 

Silence in a moment

The pen quieted in dearth

The words of the poet silenced

In silence, no mirth

Colors to gray and black

Just another day on Earth

 

Anonymity

 

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Well. I think this is brilliant. I can definitely relate to this piece. It provokes feelings of my (often times) preference for solitude and also feelings of transparency. Not fitting in and being happy about not fitting in. The imagery with this is remarkable. Visions of sitting in a chair off to the side in a crowded noisy room and yet hearing nothing but ones own private thoughts. I really appreciate the structure, too. It gives it much strength and power. * Anonymity *thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.

[Blackbirdsong]

I don't think you need to repeat the word, "Anonymity," throughout since you define it so perfectly in your writing here. It almost seems like too much at times because you've captured how it feels to be alone in a crowd so completely.

Good job.

take care :)

[Kimberly]

Anonymity

Sitting alone in my room
The same as in public places
Seen but not seen
Hidden among faces
Heard but not heard
Invisible, without traces

Anonymity

Words spoken to others
While I stand and watch
Smiling friendly bothers
Brief hellos, passing along
Silence in noise smothers

Anonymity

Passed over again
Sitting alone, full room
Nothing to say, nothing heard
Choices made in the gloom
Exits spied, paths taken
Crying out internally, this doom

Anonymity

Waiting for the moment
Recognition wanes
Brilliance of opinion given
Words of rebuff pains
The moment passes
Nothing there, no gains

Anonymity

Confusing what popularity is
Tripe passing as art
Dicta ad nauseam
Attempting my part
Spoken words given
Corpses upon a bubonic cart

Anonymity

Parity has no point
Silent words still spoken
Deaf ears to a crying world
System confidence broken
Expectations lowered
Efforts at excellence token

Anonymity

Better to hide in plain sight
Than to be heard saying nothing
A prophet wailing at a hurricane
Silenced in the roar, nothing
Desire to do, to be, to say
Words to no effect, nothing

Anonymity

Silence in a moment
The pen quieted in dearth
The words of the poet silenced
In silence, no mirth
Colors to gray and black
Just another day on Earth

Anonymity




Love this...Very good read. Makes you think. I adore your writings!

[Phil King, Sr.]

Just another day...yep, I can feel that reality. Thanks. I enjoyed that. 'Course, I feel it often, too.

[Krystal Waters]

Well structured poem with meaning behind the words. Precise wording to keep the reader to see the in-depth of the value of your material.



Krystal

[TL Boehm]

Better to hide in plain sight
Than to be heard saying nothing
A prophet wailing at a hurricane
Silenced in the roar, nothing
Desire to do, to be, to say
Words to no effect, nothing

that part right there simply screams from the page to my soul. The form of this one and the structure was right on...the ryhme scheme was excellent - and the message - clear. peace.

[Robert Luna]

Great job. I really felt you in this piece it seemed more about getting your message out instead of worrying about structure. But you still maintained a great structure and flow. This was a very deep and emotionally powerful piece as a look at the inside of you the writer and character.

Wonderful Job!!!

[James K. Blaylock]

wow,this is so awesome. i felt this poem deeply. i have felt unheard most of my life. i really enjoyed reading this. thank you so much for sending it.

[Raven Held]

This is a brilliant poem. I like how you constantly juxtapose silence and noise.

Very strong words used. I especially liked the line 'A prophet wailing at the hurricane / Silenced in the roar...'

Great job.

[Hh/happy Bunny Lives On..]

Wait... its sounds like here! loved your structure and content. You are a true writer. And what I said before, you are the most under rated person here. Maybe because when you review you really are honest. I like that, but most don't like to hear it. Bring it on baby, keep writing! Love what you send me.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is so good and i have felt this same way.. people all around yet still feel alone and not heard when i speak.. just a blank stare..
I think the use of the word anonymity after each verse works perfect and makes it more powerful..
This is a brilliant poem.. thanks for sending it..

Chloe
xoxo