Redemption

by Dave “Doc” Rogers

I sat

In survey of all

I had value

Worth

Position

 

I fell

Seated below everyone else

Least of all

Debunked

Placeless

 

I did

Making my own way

I labored in vain

To no affect

Resultless

 

I was

In isolation I existed

No one to dress my wounds

No succor

Alone

 

I cried

In desperate hope, anguish

A void within crying in hollow

Lost in ether

No echo

 

Redemptio!

Redemptio!

Pater meus!

Redemptio!

 

I died

The self ended, despair

The void stretched hopeless

Lost in death

No self

 

I heard

A voice speaking

In my behalf, reasoning

Cost weighed

Price paid

 

I lived

A kinsman claimed me

What was lost regained

In full returned

Missing naught

 

I praised

Ransomed and revalued

Judged and doomed

Counted equal

Redemption

 

 

© 20091017

Author's Note

Enjoy

Reviews

[SetApartGirl]

this is a really good piece. I really liked how it flowed and I really liked the Latin you used. Definately one to add to my favorites.

[Ladysue]

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[The Spaniard]

really well written, very heart felt. I'm glad you shared. It's one I will read again to gain more a feel for your message.

[TL Boehm]

amen and amen. for the succinct - staccato phrasing this one has volume...depth to it. Speaking on multiple levels. And of course, I appreciate bi lingual poetry. I find it fascinating when poets do that. Well scribed, my friend.

[deeps]

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