the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)
Posted 4 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I s.. read moreWords are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...
All natural, or it aint happening...
I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...
EVERYONE tells me...
"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...
How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence
Cheers at such a pleasant comment...
"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol
The word combinations are epic! through gallons of prayers, and desperate escape from reality we coat ourselves with an impenetrable veil of ignorance... Definitely an addition to my library :D
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I always welcome the insight of someone with such excellent music taste... Keep rocking the strings,.. read moreI always welcome the insight of someone with such excellent music taste... Keep rocking the strings, and thanks so much for the drop-in...!
Yup. Again, the rhythm and cadence flows. "...gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy floating dead in the sea flamboyantly": genius. I totally got that...I think. Lots of people's prayers are just words and never get past the ceiling. I like your stuff, dude, and I'm not really a poetry kinda person, but you...you are a good read.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Well thank you again, Carol... It means a lot to me to know I can help bend genres a bit in peoples .. read moreWell thank you again, Carol... It means a lot to me to know I can help bend genres a bit in peoples minds.... Words CAN be capped by a ceiling... What ceiling it be that given day, I guess is the real trick of it...
Man, you can just read this without even trying to understand it one bit and it just sings with juxtaposed vowel sounds anyway!
Of course, within it are sadly beautiful, precisely placed emotionally philosophical condensations of the deepest shadow, as though we are in the furthest interior recesses of another, at the coal face of the 'mind's mine', each verbal energy forged with the perfectly chosen markers that are conveyed by all of these, this collection of flowing and desperately tragic feeling words.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
You nailed it, to be succinct and simplistic with my words... But in all honesty... I like how you s.. read moreYou nailed it, to be succinct and simplistic with my words... But in all honesty... I like how you said it, best... Haha... Thanks again for the superb insight, Brett...
6 Years Ago
Do you know any musicians?
If not, put up a hand-written sign at the local guitar sh.. read moreDo you know any musicians?
If not, put up a hand-written sign at the local guitar shop advertising: 'LYRICS'.
I insist.
You should have this piece set to music.
Gustave Flaubert, once said:
"If a writer were to commit their words with absolute and complete honesty, then it would become impossible for them not to create a masterpiece"*
I think that's what They mean by, 'finding your voice', which, if you get the quote, you've already got, haven't you?
*Completely, out quote, courtesy of, lousiquote.com.
(I'll find the actual 19th century volume of de Maupassant short stories and copy the verbatim quote Flaubert made to him, from the foreword, later. (Read: 'never'').
I can not pretend to understand the meaning of this poem. Though, that's likely more a fault of mine than of your writing. I do like the alliteration and splashy choice of words. I've been told to avoid alliteration because it's tacky, but you, my friend, have found a niche with it. Like someone who's mastered the yo yo, you've taken something simple and honed it down to an impressive skill
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Seeing as I love Yo-Yo's... I will take that as a grand compliment, haha... Thank you, No Scholar, b.. read moreSeeing as I love Yo-Yo's... I will take that as a grand compliment, haha... Thank you, No Scholar, but I have to inject... That whatever meaning you find within things... Is usually the meaning right for you... I was not even aware "alliteration" was the word for this, heh... Thanks so much for the very thoughtful review.... I do enjoy honing...
it's like delving into the mind of a mass murderer...and the things that have pushed him to the brink of the insanity...the mind breaking...the tolerance ended---even if there really is no reason---the monster is created...you delve into his mind like dean koontz gets into the head of his evil characters...then we have more of an understanding...and sometimes even a bit of sympathy for the devil..so to speak.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Did you just compare me to Dean Koontz... What a friggin' amazing compliment... Thanks so much, Jaco.. read moreDid you just compare me to Dean Koontz... What a friggin' amazing compliment... Thanks so much, Jacob... I am a FIRM believer in painting the blackest of characters in white and pink... Sympathy for the devil is needed, imo... Again, great review...
This was so enjoyable to read through. The rhythm and word use awesome. I loved how it was almost a pause in the middle with "Blurred and slurred rhymes".
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I love that pause as well, B.A... Thanks so much...