the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)
Posted 4 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I s.. read moreWords are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...
All natural, or it aint happening...
I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...
EVERYONE tells me...
"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...
How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence
Cheers at such a pleasant comment...
"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol
Love it! This made me laugh! I don't know if that was your intent, but the flamboyant imagery and pulsating rhythmic rhyming scheme made me want to pull out my bass guitar and give it a bass riff! Great imagination and totally original.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Pulsating rhythmic madness... I dig the heck outta your view on this, and more importantly... I dig .. read morePulsating rhythmic madness... I dig the heck outta your view on this, and more importantly... I dig the musical need to release beat... If you want to, def' slap the strings a bit, hah... Great review, and totally original... Thank you much, Iron...
I'm envious of your vocabulary. I love this poem. The imagery and wording are spot-on. Fantastic work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Envy is the beginning of progress, in some, and in others... The beginning of the end... Love the re.. read moreEnvy is the beginning of progress, in some, and in others... The beginning of the end... Love the review, thank you, Layla
well constructed yet there's a sense of spontaneity throughout... loved the near/slant rhyming as well as your rhythm and form... It never felt forced or contrived...only critique I might offer is the line "Blurred and slurred rhymes"... perhaps: rhymes that blur and slur. But that's me editorializing...Not necessary at all.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I like that, my friend, def' was proposed in the back of my mind. I absolutely use that line, especi.. read moreI like that, my friend, def' was proposed in the back of my mind. I absolutely use that line, especially when frees-styling out loud, Hah, so good catch...
6 Years Ago
Thank you for the well-constructed and nicely thought out critique, truly appreciate it...!
Fantastic use of wording Silente, makes me feel like I do when anxiety strikes home and the world warps somewhat...this poem is on the edge and viscerally so...superb...
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Fantastic warping of my mind, Silver, from the anxious perfection of your insight... Honored to have.. read moreFantastic warping of my mind, Silver, from the anxious perfection of your insight... Honored to have such a gifted writer appreciate this... Thank you.
yep lost all my thoughts and I'm thinking how is this even possible...
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
It IS possible, Earth... Your writing is getting crazy... Your "DNA" poem is absolutely gorgeous... .. read moreIt IS possible, Earth... Your writing is getting crazy... Your "DNA" poem is absolutely gorgeous... Keep honing your skill... If you ever want, I am more than happy to help and bounce ideas around... Keep writing, buddy...!
6 Years Ago
I used to wonder how YOU do it all the time
6 Years Ago
By ignoring all meaning in my poetry, and focusing instead on unique vocab', syllable shape&sound..... read moreBy ignoring all meaning in my poetry, and focusing instead on unique vocab', syllable shape&sound... This all determines your "Flow-landscape"... Once you get a handle on actual syllable count and rhyme, you can start to put more meaning into stuff... It is not a bad idea to just have lots of random nonsense writing... Where you do nothing but practice cascading rhyme patterns and switchbacks
6 Years Ago
I have to practice rhymes too they make a poem more exciting and appealing too
It is not ALL about rhyming, but yes... Well, in my mind.. It IS all about rhyming, but usually... Y.. read moreIt is not ALL about rhyming, but yes... Well, in my mind.. It IS all about rhyming, but usually... Yes, rhymes make poems a bit more exciting and engaging
6 Years Ago
You're welcome. looking forward to your next masterpiece.
Whoa, your rhyming skills and large vocabulary of words to rhyme with never ceases to amaze me. I can't imagine how much time you must take to think up such a vibrant flow and still put so much meaning in each piece. Honestly, your pieces remind me a whole lot of Sage Francis, which is one of my favorite hip hop artists. Your skill man, it just blows me away!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Oh, wow... Ik him, and to be compared to Sage... What a heady compliment... Sin, and I thank you so .. read moreOh, wow... Ik him, and to be compared to Sage... What a heady compliment... Sin, and I thank you so very much... I never ever use a thesaurus when I write, and everything is a freestyle... So this took about half an hour to write, most of my stuff takes between 15-45 mins... Your praise blows me away... Thanks again...
6 Years Ago
What? 15 mins with such large vocabs and crushing lines like that?
6 Years Ago
Yes. I have hundreds of things like this... I rarely post 1/4 of my stuff... Heh
6 Years Ago
and something i've notice is that you barely repeat a vocarbs, that is impressive...
6 Years Ago
Unless it is intentional... No, I try not to, but it does happen... HOWEVER... I will mention... Tha.. read moreUnless it is intentional... No, I try not to, but it does happen... HOWEVER... I will mention... That I do dictionary checks in-between verses sometimes... But the reason it goes so fast is the freestyle rule I have... Not really skill, heh... I have to write 5-6 different pages of poetry before I can land on something meaningful in my abstract at times... So it def' is not fool-proof...
6 Years Ago
Wow... you are one hardworking guy I have to do that too
6 Years Ago
It sure does start to become easier the more you practice and write... The biggest piece of advice I.. read moreIt sure does start to become easier the more you practice and write... The biggest piece of advice I have... Is to not edit or second-guess what you write... Or even, hell, write with a meaning or end in mind... Just write to write and practice rhymes... Then eventually... The free-form becomes more defined as you use lines over and over in different ways... Do not worry about ANYTHING but just getting it down...
6 Years Ago
you know that was my problem "second guessing my work."
Everyone does, man, we all hate and question our own stuff at some point... I just click onto a new .. read moreEveryone does, man, we all hate and question our own stuff at some point... I just click onto a new notepad and save what I was doing if I get stuck...
6 Years Ago
reading your work has inspired me to write even more.thank you.
6 Years Ago
Oh, thank you very much... L.C... That means the world to me... To know my work helps inspire more w.. read moreOh, thank you very much... L.C... That means the world to me... To know my work helps inspire more writing... That is what it is all about...!
Excellent and so skillful mastery of words, ideas, rhythm and rhyme! "Gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy...floating dead in the sea flamboyantly." Tapestry of sadism, ..limelight fading posturism"-Who else can paint a picture like this? No one but you! Loved this.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I am sure lots of people have artistic ability, haha... But your heartfelt appreciation warms me... .. read moreI am sure lots of people have artistic ability, haha... But your heartfelt appreciation warms me... Thanks so much, and you have nailed some of my favorite lines...! Good eye...!