You certainly shuffle your thoughts, sir.. and yet, somehow in shuffling, create a cascade of liquid gold. I hesitate to read back and back to when first written, and will sit still to keep my own promise but feel that there will be many different observation about the meaning of this or that. Your meter had me reading louder and louder til I'm tempted to say, the walls rocked but.. Obviously the words are laid at someone else's feet,
' I sit outside and mind my own business...
But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality
I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...
Sodden grease and I follow-she.. '
onwards into space, dark and light, dancing through time to your own heartbeat but wrapped- within someone else's reflection. Need read this again
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1 Month Ago
Thanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of wall.. read moreThanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of walls that transpired upon reading.
I am, after all...
Dylan, the Shaker of Walls
Oh my goodness that last line, "...and I'm free-falling asleep," it has impact! The rest was phenomenal as well: a man broken before he met the words he could forge, he was falling in and out of reality, and free falling into tomorrow in his sleep. Master-class work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Master-class reviewing, as always, Chris... You stun me with your take, and refresh my intake of tho.. read moreMaster-class reviewing, as always, Chris... You stun me with your take, and refresh my intake of thought... Thanks so much... Truly
Wow, this is an adorable piece....the first few lines i loved the most...even the whole poem is good....keep it up, Silente.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Haha, even the whole thing is good, eh? Thanks so much, Priyanshi... I loved your first line, but th.. read moreHaha, even the whole thing is good, eh? Thanks so much, Priyanshi... I loved your first line, but the whole review was acceptable... Lol, you are funny...
all i can say its again a magical wordplay... extremely well written and i wish this magic should be revealed out in front of the whole world in the form of your published book... i'll be the first online buyer i guess... :) :) :) :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Haha... Oh wow, Abhishek... You truly humble me with the heavy praise... I will be sure to let you k.. read moreHaha... Oh wow, Abhishek... You truly humble me with the heavy praise... I will be sure to let you know if that book ever becomes available... Thank you ever so much for the encouragement...
Wow amazing, it's really deep. I like how keep the rhyme going. Love your work!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Rhyming is fun to keep going, that is for sure, love the amazing review... Thank you, Psychotic Lily.. read moreRhyming is fun to keep going, that is for sure, love the amazing review... Thank you, Psychotic Lily...
The last line makes me feel good...
I enjoyed the adventures this poem took me to...
Keep it up :)
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Mr. Writer... I have continued to enjoy your flow as well... Keep crafting and excelling .. read moreThank you, Mr. Writer... I have continued to enjoy your flow as well... Keep crafting and excelling in your form everyday...
I appreciate that, is not me, however who has the way with words... They seem to more-so have a way .. read moreI appreciate that, is not me, however who has the way with words... They seem to more-so have a way with me, heh...
I feel a journey unfolding of the narrator from oblivion into the spot life of challenges and the mantle of changes. Your fallen tree might nourish the hungry in the feast of sentiments and sediments. I can go on and on by your inspiration...:).........
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6 Years Ago
It is breathtaking to see your twist on my inspiration, Sami... What a compliment to hear you say th.. read moreIt is breathtaking to see your twist on my inspiration, Sami... What a compliment to hear you say the river flows on and on... Thanks so much...