Before Metaphors

Before Metaphors

A Poem by Chase Dylan
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Metal forged...

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Before the metaphors and metal forged I sat ignored and lonesome
 alone and broken...
 Groanin' in an ocean of token defeat
 rote motions
 dead-feet
 my feats retreat...
 Bleeding dreams and fleeced sheep
 eaten lacking wheat
 a sheath for elite-meat-treats and bleep-heaps...
 Driven deeper-steeper
 hear her cry when satellites fly...
 I sit outside and mind my own business...
 But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality
 I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...
Sodden grease and I follow-she
 all ah-me
 and I'm falling-free... 
Solemn freeze
 and I'm free-falling asleep... 

© 2017 Chase Dylan


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You certainly shuffle your thoughts, sir.. and yet, somehow in shuffling, create a cascade of liquid gold. I hesitate to read back and back to when first written, and will sit still to keep my own promise but feel that there will be many different observation about the meaning of this or that. Your meter had me reading louder and louder til I'm tempted to say, the walls rocked but.. Obviously the words are laid at someone else's feet,

' I sit outside and mind my own business...
But in this bees nest I'm best before checks in reality
I'm a liability for the masks of sentimental sentinels brandishing fundamental finality on the mantle of rivalry...
Sodden grease and I follow-she.. '

onwards into space, dark and light, dancing through time to your own heartbeat but wrapped- within someone else's reflection. Need read this again

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

1 Month Ago

Thanks very much, Emma Green.
It would certainly not be too much to state the rocking of wall.. read more



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CMC
Oh my goodness that last line, "...and I'm free-falling asleep," it has impact! The rest was phenomenal as well: a man broken before he met the words he could forge, he was falling in and out of reality, and free falling into tomorrow in his sleep. Master-class work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Master-class reviewing, as always, Chris... You stun me with your take, and refresh my intake of tho.. read more
CMC

6 Years Ago

You're always welcome Silente.
Wow, this is an adorable piece....the first few lines i loved the most...even the whole poem is good....keep it up, Silente.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Priyanshi

6 Years Ago

That's true...the whole poem was superb.....its always a pleasure reading your work.
Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

It is always a pleasure hearing such kind words over my work... Thank you again...!
Priyanshi

6 Years Ago

ha ha ha, My pleasure.
all i can say its again a magical wordplay... extremely well written and i wish this magic should be revealed out in front of the whole world in the form of your published book... i'll be the first online buyer i guess... :) :) :) :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Haha... Oh wow, Abhishek... You truly humble me with the heavy praise... I will be sure to let you k.. read more
Wow amazing, it's really deep. I like how keep the rhyme going. Love your work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Rhyming is fun to keep going, that is for sure, love the amazing review... Thank you, Psychotic Lily.. read more
What I have read is beyond perfection in its words!
Every word you wrote gave me an image as I was reading it.

Well done Silente, an other day and other great job! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Much appreciated, Joey... Another day, another fun review... Thank you...
Joey Nizz

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :)
The last line makes me feel good...
I enjoyed the adventures this poem took me to...
Keep it up :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Mr. Writer... I have continued to enjoy your flow as well... Keep crafting and excelling .. read more
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Silente :)
No problem
Loved this piece. Nicely written

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Maria

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. You have a unique way with words
Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I appreciate that, is not me, however who has the way with words... They seem to more-so have a way .. read more
Maria

6 Years Ago

Lol. That does make sense, indeed.
I feel a journey unfolding of the narrator from oblivion into the spot life of challenges and the mantle of changes. Your fallen tree might nourish the hungry in the feast of sentiments and sediments. I can go on and on by your inspiration...:).........

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

It is breathtaking to see your twist on my inspiration, Sami... What a compliment to hear you say th.. read more
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

All true. You are welcome....::::)))))
this is a nice poem......

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Earth, means much to me coming from such a talented poet, such as yourself...
The earth (Titan maphaha)

6 Years Ago

"Talented?" thank you
This is superbly written! Great play on words here

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Dream, I do so enjoy playing...

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Chase Dylan
Chase Dylan

Denver, CO



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