King of Flawed Reason

King of Flawed Reason

A Poem by Silente
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Imperfection...

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Festering molestation of achin'...
I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...
I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...
For the reason I stand alone most the time...
Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...
Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...
I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...
Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...
Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...
A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...
So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...
The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars...

© 2017 Silente



Author's Note

Silente
Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

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We stand together in feeling like this then :P
I think you needn't worry, btw. Your rhymes are really kickass ;)
Oh and this was the first write of yours that I didn't have to reread to understand haha ;P
Though melancholic, your flow here is remarkable as always, Silente.

"So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."
Loved this line. :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

Your logic impresses me, you win, but then again... I would expect nothing less from a thousand+ yea.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

lmao you're better at humour than I give you credit for ;)
And you must admit, you got this .. read more
Silente

4 Months Ago

I admit nothing.... NOTHING....!
*Whispers*
nothing..............



Reviews

The demons of depression dot the air
And grow before uncertainties at bay.
A mighty force of poetry and care,
rides high in showing us a stronger way.

The questions cling like always, from afar,
but verses hold the power of relief.
A gasp, to rise above the reset bar,
denying doubt its handhold onto grief.

But, what of imperfections in one’s life?
Will they tar and feather all the good?
Depression is the cloud, the king of strife,
depending only on those things that could.

I think I understand this from the start
But if I missed the boat, it’s all on me.
The message here is one we take to heart.
You’ve left it plain and clear for us to see.


Posted 1 Week Ago


Wow, this poem is so relatable for me. While reading this I can recall my own experiences and similar emotions I face. In my life I tend to doubt myself and my ability to do things "right". This piece is very deep and I love the way you had written it. I find that writing helps me deal with the issues I face daily. I am so happy we have the opportunity to share our work and help others. This truly helped, thank you!

Posted 1 Week Ago


Depression has away to grab one by the undies and dig in that wedgie. Sucks really but we can only be strong, hope it passes, and keep a true realization that we are the purest of talents and abilities. Easier said than done.

Always and with love

Jayden D.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Week Ago

Thank you, Jayden, it means a lot to hear appreciation for this one, but also saddens me... Your exc.. read more
Matthew Kult

1 Week Ago

Indeed. You are welcome

Matthew
This was wonderful. I just loved the "rat's uncle"...never heard that one before. The write is filled with a sort of self-doubt or even self-loathing perhaps...a sort of depressing demeanor that exudes a sense of being lost and desperate. But then, there is hope and courage here...a grabbing of the boot straps to pull the self out of self-pity and into action. I like that. I think we've all been down that road at one point. I see some great original descriptive work here as well. I enjoyed.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Week Ago

Oh wow, what a wonderful review, thanks so much, Fabian... This was inspired by Chester Bennington's.. read more
This is very deep and unique, you word choices were spot on and the rhyming is very distinctive.

Thanks for writing this.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading, Joey
Joey Nizz

1 Week Ago

Your welcome :)
A clever and colorful creation.
Depression can be a living death--as if the soul's pilot light is flickering.
High-level work, S!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Jimmy
' I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...
For the reason I stand alone most the time...'

Those words touch mind and heart, Silente.. and all the before and after until that very last phrase which jolts sense into near tears.

Apart from that.. you've used your unique style to best display in this poem.. your words recount thougths past, present.. and a wondering about how things are.. but you do it in pensive tone, maybe. Special

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, EJ
emmajoy

2 Weeks Ago

Welcome, Silent
Silente

2 Weeks Ago

If you know who Chester Bennington was, this was actually sparked after his suicide. (He was the lea.. read more
I like this bro. The message is such an important one so respect for you keeping the spotlight on the issue. We hear you loud and clear my friend. I hope you're well and I'm always here man.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Duff
method

1 Month Ago

You bet man.
Real mental depression exist. thanks for sharing this nice poem.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

It really does... Thank you again, Roxane
This one is amazing.
One of your best so far.
Thanks for sharing.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

I appreciate that sentiment, Poet, thank you very much

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