The Hindenburg Grinch

Ethereal I'm feeling...

Ethereal I'm feelin'...

But a seal will let go and I'll feel flow

The real gold-plated crack of a whip

I'm sacked and in a fit, I try to fit all my cracks onto my lips

my wit is dimmed and brittle-bricked, a bic spittin' lint

and I recycle wins so my lines can be like hymns

make 'em grin, make 'em grimly spin like rims

like trim that be factually slim

Like a factory binge, I inch ahead of the lynch

My factor is cinched

I'm a shoe-in for Grinch

Naughty or nice, I'm-ah sin till it explodes like Hindenburg the blimp

 I'm now limp cause inner implosions of emotions leave me rote and gimped

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I've never been drawn to rap becuz the topics are often about violence or meanness . . . but with your poems, I get to enjoy the pleasure of ongoing complex rhymes with repeating wordplay on various sounds, but with fun & interesting topics instead. Your word-sound-play is exquisite, some of the best I've read! *smile*

[Chase Dylan]

Some of the best you have read...? Then you have obviously never read your own work, cause.. Whoooo-weee... What a ride, and thank you, Barley... Glad to bring the culture to those who would not normally care

[barleygirl]

Thanks for the kudos (((HUGS)))

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"I'm now limp"-after writing a poem as stunning as this, limpness is understandable! Synchronised starburst of stellar words, images, beat, rhyme and flow speaking of pumping out poems at great cost. Each one of yours costing sweat and blood. Rest now Excellente, so you can write again another day...Kudos my friend!

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Annette... Haha, I have written so much lately... It FEELS like rest, though...

[emmajoy]

'and I recycle wins so my lines can be like hymns
make 'em grin, make 'em grimly spin like rims
like trim .. .. '

I never know if you're humouring your reviewers or wanting to teach them how to find musical phrases that stick in the mind and lure a free dance a day feeling! Whatever, whichever, nobody can play your tunes, or juggle language, or.. just be the slightly over the edge creator of mysterious melodrama! Clever stuff.. again.

[Chase Dylan]

No, no they can not, and thank you, EJ... Haha... I think an assortment of all three.... Yes... Allllll threeeee..... Thanks

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so good at these...this style...rolling off the tongue so sublime...feeling the words in more ways than one...content, but also rhythmic...very rhythmic.

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Jacob, could not be heard from a more talented source