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Sacred Vapors

Sacred Vapors

A Poem by Silente
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Submarine-stage...

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I'm untamed
Insane brain lame-reined in to fillet saber-lain drains
In labor I gain ravens braver than slavers able to savor gall-breaker takers
if you're in favor lets rape-her and traverse papers for diverse capers
I'm tapered
a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage
a rage in a cage set like a face-plant
I'm like Abraham and freed the slaves of verbal-trends
I'm global-sent and vorpal-bent
but low-rent keeps me lent to the lamb
I'm slammed and lambasted
ran outta RAM by a ram slipperier than grand
By ghosts boasted most toast by the roastiest roach
I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone

© 2017 Silente



Author's Note

Silente
Umm... Stuff...

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You're back in the groove, my friend! My favourite lines in this one are:
"a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage".
Keep 'em coming!


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Horseman, it is much appreciated
The Iron Horseman

11 Months Ago

You're welcome, Silente.



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Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?

Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.

And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)

If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.


Regards,

-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...

(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)

I look forward to your further cowardly silence.

Posted 3 Days Ago


Too cool. This reminds me of the poetry done by Jack Kerouac. Are you familiar with him?

Posted 5 Months Ago


Lots of comparism and vuvid imagery. Well crafted.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

9 Months Ago

Thank you, I appreciate that... Comparison is important!
Very well penned! Keep writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

9 Months Ago

Thanks, Katy... Stealing my lines of praise...! Hah
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reminds me of a mix of Kerouac poeticising to jazz and some great hip hop verse, grabs you right from the start.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

9 Months Ago

NO clue what that "Kerouac" is, but I am now intrigued, hah... Thank you, I def love hip hop
your wordplay is out of this world dude. i mean, geez i thought i was good, iv never read or heard anything like you create. you must got a mastermind or something. this is real clever and ingenious stuff you got

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

10 Months Ago

Wow, thank you so much, Jackie... Lots of practice and hard work= A "mastermind", heh...
You're back in the groove, my friend! My favourite lines in this one are:
"a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage".
Keep 'em coming!


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Horseman, it is much appreciated
The Iron Horseman

11 Months Ago

You're welcome, Silente.
wow this is wonderful written . thanks for the poem

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Thank you, you are welcome
Wow, a real tongue twister, lol. Very descriptive and well-chosen words. A poem mixed in a blender and I mean this as a compliment.

Weirdly good. :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Who does not love blenders... Thanks, Lovecraft
Lovecraft

11 Months Ago

No problem. Just recently came back to the Cafe.
Silente

11 Months Ago

Heh, me as well... I would not really define myself as having returned, however... Just visiting, lo.. read more
Shifting gears at times
often like a rap song of rhyme...
dark and violent with no control
in the thinking as in confusion brought on by an unknown substance mingling with others in one's system.
Nice structure.


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Josie, def' lots of gears changed when I edited this from its original rap form...

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Silente

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