Sacred Vapors

Sacred Vapors

A Poem by Silente
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Submarine-stage...

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I'm untamed
Insane brain lame-reined in to fillet saber-lain drains
In labor I gain ravens braver than slavers able to savor gall-breaker takers
if you're in favor lets rape-her and traverse papers for diverse capers
I'm tapered
a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage
a rage in a cage set like a face-plant
I'm like Abraham and freed the slaves of verbal-trends
I'm global-sent and vorpal-bent
but low-rent keeps me lent to the lamb
I'm slammed and lambasted
ran outta RAM by a ram slipperier than grand
By ghosts boasted most toast by the roastiest roach
I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone

© 2017 Silente



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Silente
Umm... Stuff...

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The one thing i can say, hand on heart is .. that a really sane person would happily go crazy on your musical escapades with words, Silente! You make sense in a way out/way off manner, almost force folk, this one anyway, into gasping, pausing then re.reading the precious jewels your word-play creates. Seems there are mild forms of anarchy jumping the gun in this: I'm tapered~ a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers~ on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors'

Sanity has its place politically, verbally, socially (or antisocially perhaps) sort of sympathetically and - loudly. Love it!

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silente

3 Months Ago

Thank you, EJ... I like that... "force" folk... Hah



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Lots of comparism and vuvid imagery. Well crafted.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you, I appreciate that... Comparison is important!
Very well penned! Keep writing

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Silente

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks, Katy... Stealing my lines of praise...! Hah
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JC
reminds me of a mix of Kerouac poeticising to jazz and some great hip hop verse, grabs you right from the start.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

3 Weeks Ago

NO clue what that "Kerouac" is, but I am now intrigued, hah... Thank you, I def love hip hop
your wordplay is out of this world dude. i mean, geez i thought i was good, iv never read or heard anything like you create. you must got a mastermind or something. this is real clever and ingenious stuff you got

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Month Ago

Wow, thank you so much, Jackie... Lots of practice and hard work= A "mastermind", heh...
You're back in the groove, my friend! My favourite lines in this one are:
"a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage".
Keep 'em coming!


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Horseman, it is much appreciated
The Iron Horseman

2 Months Ago

You're welcome, Silente.
wow this is wonderful written . thanks for the poem

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

Thank you, you are welcome
Wow, a real tongue twister, lol. Very descriptive and well-chosen words. A poem mixed in a blender and I mean this as a compliment.

Weirdly good. :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

Who does not love blenders... Thanks, Lovecraft
Lovecraft

2 Months Ago

No problem. Just recently came back to the Cafe.
Silente

2 Months Ago

Heh, me as well... I would not really define myself as having returned, however... Just visiting, lo.. read more
Shifting gears at times
often like a rap song of rhyme...
dark and violent with no control
in the thinking as in confusion brought on by an unknown substance mingling with others in one's system.
Nice structure.


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Josie, def' lots of gears changed when I edited this from its original rap form...
Well, I suppose there is a place for everyone.... you too! But apart from the meaning, the poem reads really lyrically with the assonance and alliteration and made up words. You are very clever at that!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

I thank you, Astri, and humbly agree... We all have a place...
"I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone"

You can start rapping now hahahha. I think This will be a good rap track!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

2 Months Ago

I am def' rapping now, haha, and it is going quite well... Thank you, Cecelia
Cecelia A. Green

2 Weeks Ago

welcome hahaha!!!

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