Deconstructing My Inefficiency

Deconstructing My Inefficiency

A Poem by Silente
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A fish in the sea...

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Deconstructing my inefficiency I find deficiency
A fish in the sea
Unable to see past inner dirty beeps that I speak when wrapped in fleet clouds
A sun god with a hound
I'm crass, I'll blast with mashes of fast acts
I'm a spaz, I'll cast the branch back so it smacks you as you pass
I rap with white eyes so black ice can fight the sunlight and become shadowed night
tight-lipped in fright, they speak with spite in spite of the signs saying do or die
So I did and didn't die, but that was a lie cause I'm dry now
a husk of slime with flies now...
I sense rejection like deaths inception found me hovering before an entity
who laid me humble before an enemy, who said to me rise today and take this remedy
be a servant and prosperity will find you like prophecy
You will have ten dreams of fallacy
I see Alice in steep allowance making cups outta gallons of jealousy
the policy is to gallop free of abhorrent heaps of troubled seas
It's said to be fumbles with creeps in the mud hole of greed
but gallantly I sense unburdened crumbles...
Much like having tea and crumpets in kevlar jeans    


© 2017 Silente



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Zoe
It's always the same, but actually very different every time. Lol. I hope you get what I mean. If you don't, then fair enough...After all I don't usually get what YOU mean. Hell, this was funny! Especially these lines:
'I'm a spaz, I'll cast the branch back so it smacks you as you pass'
'a husk of slime with flies now...'
And the last one, of course, was the show stopper. Mind boggingly written!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

I gotcha, heh... I think, and a hoped thought, I guess is as good as a known one... Thank you, Zoe
RolandDee

2 Months Ago

Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail betw.. read more



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Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?

Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.

And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)

If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.


Regards,

-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...

(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)

I look forward to your further cowardly silence.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?

Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.

And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)

If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.


Regards,

-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...

(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)

I look forward to your further cowardly silence.

Posted 2 Months Ago


You are an amazing poet. Interesting use of imagery. I can relate to this one. Sometimes I have a difficult time seeing past my own flaws. Sometimes I feel inadequate. Nicely written! You sure have a way with words.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Damn that's sharp. Your word play and poetry rhythm never fails to impress. This is a great piece.
-Richard

Posted 8 Months Ago


I love the last line here!
Evolving into something unique/

Posted 9 Months Ago


"the signs saying do or die"

wow.


Posted 9 Months Ago


ha, love the play of words, dear author :) you never know what you may find when deconstructing your inefficiency :D masterfully done, as always, wish i'd reach such levels...

Posted 10 Months Ago


I won't lie , i didn't understand many of the vocabularies ( i am not native English speaker ), but what i understand is amazing and deep

Posted 10 Months Ago


It's an awesome piece resonating the words of those classic poets where rhythm and synchronization fitted the heart. thanks for sharing

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the kind words, Gaurav
"be a servant and prosperity will find you like prophecy"
This line showed me that you have a moral lurking somewhere in you...that gives me inspiration. good write dear

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

11 Months Ago

We all need some moral structure lurking deep within us.... I am glad to have inspired and shown you.. read more

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