Ciumes (translation below)

Hope you like it :)

Ciumes, flecha penetrante

Que rasga a superficie da alma

Num interior choro infantil.

Grito manhoso do eterno inseguro

Que deseja com fogo ardente

O que jamais lhe pertenceu.

Assim sinto-me,

No mais profundo de mim,

Ameacado, assustado, magoado

Pelos olhares, pelas convercas

Que dela, ele roubou-me,

Pelas suas atencoes que nao a mim 

Foram dedicadas.

TRANSLATION

Title: Jealousy

Jealousy, penetrating arrow

That tears up the surface of the soul

In an interior childish weeping.

Illogic* cry of the eternal insecure

Who desires with fervent fire

What never belonged to him.

That way I feel,

In the deepest part of me,

Threatened, afraid, hurt

By the looks, by the chats

That from her, he stole me,

By her attentions that never to me

Were dedicated.

*Manhoso is simply one of those tricky words I can't translate from Portuguese to any other language, Illogical is by no way a fair translation is just the best I could think of.

Author's Note

Written several poems I still haven't had the chance to post, still this one was so heart-felt that I decided it couldn't wait. It was inspired by the jealousy I felt two days ago when I saw a friend talking to the girl I'm in love with.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry.
"Jealousy, penetrating arrow
That tears up the surface of the soul
In an interior childish weeping."
I enjoyed the above lines. Great meaning in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[TL Boehm]

jealousy is such a powerful motivator. and this poem is a fine example of that consuming fire emotion.

[Leslie Philibert]

Great poem; and every guy will understand you...

[Rachelle]

最好 最好！ 外 人 you have captured the emotion succinctly!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Xie, xie, my friend :)

[Inda]

Ohh, that longing i know only too well my friend and you've captured it perfectly, as always another flawless piece!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A detailed and elegant piece well done