Silent in the chaos

Silent in the chaos

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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Done during a boring class at school.

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Silent in the chaos, I'm standing;
amongst the screams and shouts of distant people
staying in this little room of walls, and knowledge, and human captivity
waiting for the bell to cry their freedom.
I don't care about it, since I'm lost in my thoughts;
surfing in the waves of my worries,
flying in the blue skies of my mind chasing for my biggest dreams.
' Shout in the silence, I want and need,
give my secrets away in this empty stage,
scream out my lungs in every single word
give no mercy to this unbreakable silence
Untill I find out,
just like I can't stop the sunset to arrive,
I can't either break the outside silence with my inside chaos.

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
About grammar:
I apologize if I made some grammar mistakes, English is a foreign language for me so I may make some mistakes you can find silly.
About that ' in the 3rd stanza it stands for "to", I know I had to put an infinitive (to shout) but I didn't like how that "to" sounded so I put the ' in its place.
I know I don't need to say and after a coma (,) but in this case I used it on purpose because it helps make the pause even longer (and that's what i was looking for)
If i made any other mistake, please tell me :)
Hope you liked the poem, I worked really hard on it :)

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when silence becomes chaos you must liberate your soul but, when chaos becomes silence you have touched purification and nirvana...to feel helpless to both is only human...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

外人 (Gaijin)

11 Years Ago

So you also believe in Nirvana, other cool stuff I should know? xD
the poem is excellent i can tell u worked hard on it great write man:))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I understand this poem. When we want time to go faster. Time moved too slow and we can begin to think too much. I like this poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It takes a stnace where others fail to follow, a well written piece, well done, good read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well i really like it :) And you can put my poem(used to be) on Facebook :) i hope you review more and write more so i can review yours :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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