The Jester's Repentance

The Jester's Repentance

A Poem by Doodley
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With sincerest apologies.

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Beneath blustering winds in beauteous black,
On a castle's walls, sleek grey, but cracked;

Did the Jester and Princess, into each eyes did they stare,
Amidst the silence and din of the gargoyles there.

For the halo of love that was above this twin pair,
Had fallen to ground, now lay dead in despair.

The Jester of course had tried all in vain,
To win back the heart of his great love again.

But a Jester and Princess? Should such a twain meet,
Could only mean torture and death at King's feet.

This love once had blossomed, but alas, now did wilt,
Like a free flowing channel choked down by its silt.

After the last of their words had fled, clean astray,
Did the Princess, all righteous, on Dragon wings, fly away.

And the Jester all broken, beaten, black, blue,
Did descend to the courtyard under this new painful hue.

From his waistbelt he took his lifeblood, his harp,
And cried to the Heavens like a babe in his tarp.

"You foolhardy beast! You poor excuse of a man!
You just crushed the heart of the love of this land!"

"You wretched imbecile! What have you done!
To hurt the soul of your lover, make her sad, flee, run!"

And the tears on his cheeks like a silver waterfall,
Betold all the pain that his heart had befall.

As the sadness enshrouded and in darkness did he cry,
His ditty soon softened into a longing goodbye.

"I'll love You, my beauty, as long as sunflowers dance,
In the meadows here yonder, in the Summer's warm trance."

"I've hurt you, my sweetness, my love of my life,
Forgiveness I beg you, shall plead in my strife."

And at the foot of a willow did the Jester soon fall,
And crumpled in madness, in sadness, in thrall.

To the ground in his misery his head, did he lay,
And he hoped and he dreamed for her friendship, someday.



© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A medieval inspired narrative poem.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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"The Jestor's Repentance"
Doodley,
The title caught my attention as according to lore this character is not known for it's own creative or independent thinking. Somehow he manages to win the heart of a lovely princess. Now that is amazing!
This poem tells a story which could be added to as the final curtain is one of humble repentance on the main character's part. I found it winsome and inspiring and real.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. I appreciate you taking the time to read some of my olde.. read more



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"The Jestor's Repentance"
Doodley,
The title caught my attention as according to lore this character is not known for it's own creative or independent thinking. Somehow he manages to win the heart of a lovely princess. Now that is amazing!
This poem tells a story which could be added to as the final curtain is one of humble repentance on the main character's part. I found it winsome and inspiring and real.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. I appreciate you taking the time to read some of my olde.. read more
What a wonderful tale, the imagery is amazing. I could envision the jester in all his despair, the bleak castle! the rhyming is also excellent ... great job!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hebe. I appreciate the kind praise.
This was an absolute pleasure to read. It was easy to form a relationship with the Jester. I think everyone can identify with him, at least I know that I can. To spurn love and hope for the least drop of friendship to keep that person in your life.

The meter and rhyme of this work puts me in mind of the medieval bards, harping away at a fire in an inn. I would love to see this expanded! A true epic bard's song.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Poetic License. Humbled by your kind words of praise for this p.. read more
Poetic License

8 Months Ago

I do hope that you will. Honestly - it puts me in mind of a Beowulf type epic. Perhaps your Jester.. read more
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Zoe
A spellbinding melancholic poem. Maintains a perfect balance of sweetness and sadness throughout. The jester's naivety and his intensity of love for her was portrayed wonderfully. But alas, a happy ending was not to be.
Beautifully penned!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. I appreciate you visiting this older piece of mine.
Zoe

8 Months Ago

No problem
Love your old sounding writes when read aloud. The rhyming is great in this too. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading.
Ok
This made my eye tear

that's weird



Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Precious Seconds

2 Years Ago

lol ...... only a wise man realizes his mistakes and apologizes
and that is a beautiful thing.. read more
Doodley

2 Years Ago

Very wise words. Thank you for all these reads. I appreciate it. And it will be repaid. In kind. Pre.. read more
Precious Seconds

2 Years Ago

lol .... take all the revenge you can lol
I love the narrative aspect of this piece. When a poem tells a tale there is nothing better. The mood of this poem is set by the fairy tale like feel you have bestowed upon it. It sort of weaves its way throughout the stanzas, and I absolutely find that enchanting when the writer makes me see their world, feel their pain. Great write...
.. Misty

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

2 Years Ago

Oh, the fatigue...I made fairytale into two words. Writer-somnia strikes again. ;)
Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Misty, for reading and reviewing. I am glad you enjoyed this poem. I have written a coupl.. read more
dear poet... I love songs that sing of willow trees.
You have a special talent ... truly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you, very much, Pat, for your extremely encouraging words. Thank you for reading and reviewing.. read more
Your poem is mostly well-written with a clear, unmistakable storyline that balances fantasy & reality successfully & artfully. I felt the rhythm was consistent & contributed to smooth reading, but once in awhile, I felt your rhymes were manufactured, choosing words that didn't quite match the message, in order to capture the rhyme. I like the abundance of alliteration & the way your language stayed "in character" for this era & style. It's easy to understand & feel the narrator's repentance & tacit apology.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the read/ review, Barleygirl. This was a hurriedly written piece, that i wrote when i was.. read more
barleygirl

2 Years Ago

WOW! I didn't mean to come off as so offensive. Honestly, I'm just old & forgetful, so I have a hard.. read more
Doodley

2 Years Ago

Not offended, Barleygirl! I am not that thin-skinned. I can take criticism. I just don't like that w.. read more
-with no words left to say-

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Indeed, Bacchus, Indeed. Thankfully the words written here did work. The jester was saved. Thank you.. read more

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Added on February 16, 2016
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