Broken Hallelujah

Broken Hallelujah

A Poem by Doodley
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Woke upon a Sunday morn,
In the shining light of the Autumn dawn,
That brought the heavenly vision into view.

Looked into your smiling face,
As you stood there in your dress of lace,
Like Aphrodite in all her divinity born anew.

I wondered how it could ever be,
That you opened up your heart for me,
And gave me all your kisses of morning dew.

Before too long that sun went down,
And thunderclouds brought on my frown,
As the darkness in your eyes enveloped you.

You bowed your head with eternal grace,
And turned and flew far from my place,
And left me all alone and feeling blue.

And now i sit upon this lonely hill,
In the darkening night in the Autumn chill,
Pondering all the things that i must do.

I must get away from this haunting place,
Pack my dreams inside my travelling case,
And burn all the roots of love i grew.

For there will never be another dawn,
Like i saw that blessed Sunday morn,
As long as my inner eye still pictures you.

For i just know that i can't go on,
Listening to this Broken Hallelujah song,
And have it seep into the pores of all i do.

So for this to you is my last goodbye,
As i spread my wings and soar to sky,
An adieu for all of you the chosen few.

And perhaps we'll meet again someday,
When my soul does shine like a Summer's day,
And drowns me in a rainbow-coloured hue.

Who should care should a poet die,
You have my poems it's time to fly,
Goodbye, Arrivederci and Adieu.


© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
An experimental piece. Words.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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How you manage to evoke such poignancy and pathos with every poem you write is a wonder! This has a mythical tenor to its narration and yet it is anything but a laborious read. I like the scale on which it is mounted, I like the use of allusions, even though it doesn't have a twist that I somehow was expecting from you, but then, c'est la vie. Sometimes to expect a twist and follow it up with one would make the author predictable.

A great write again, Doodley. Look forward to many such poems and more.
Best,
M.

Posted 8 Months Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much, Mallika, for reading and giving your generous appraisal of this piece. Greatly .. read more



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I am so glad I found this. I love it from beginning to end. It not only flows well but tells a story. It is going into my favorites. Nice write. Valentine

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Valentine. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Very nicely done. It tells a story, evokes a poignancy that is easily felt by the reader.
The imagery is strong, and pulls us in as we read the lines. Great piece.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, ReedWrite. I appreciate the kind words.
Pat already stated what I was thinking, this is in a class with master Cohen's amazing expertise.

For there will never be another dawn,
Like i saw that blessed Sunday morn,
As long as my inner eye still pictures you.

Love that verse, it's all spectacular.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Paloma. I appreciate your kind words.
I think your experimental piece is a sign of perfection. I loved this write, Jay. I haven't heard this Broken Hallelujah song. All the verses are equally beautiful.
This has a different feel as compared to your other writings. You have this brilliant ability to create a story out of nothing, I have said this earlier too. You can give a life to a dead body. I guess if given a topic of 'dead soul', you can make it relive through your writing.
Life without heartaches is not possible. We have to live on. But having a chance to love and being loved is enough sometimes. Giving a good farewell is absolutely necessary for moving on.
Very well put. Brilliant imagery.
Great rhythm, Great flow and Great rhyme
Keep writing and keep inspiring !!


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Very kind words. I did write a poem called "Lost Sou.. read more
dear Doodley... Is it a coincidence this reminds me of
the Hallelujah song by Leonard Cohen... which I adore.
You have a flair for this broken Hallelujah. truly, Pat

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pat. And yes, this poem was inspired by the song; but particula.. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Month Ago

dear Doodley... many of us have a broken Hallelujah. I find your poem a addendum which Leonard Cohe.. read more
I shall try to be calm. >_< *takes another ten deep breaths* Freak, this was awesome!! August is a word that comes to mind, meaning respected and impressive. So it's totally out of context to say that this poem was august but anyhow, what i basically mean it that it's amazing in spiritual proportions. :) (sorry, that wasn't very calm. i'll try harder next time.)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for another read/review, Andronicus. I understand your use of the term "august"- French/la.. read more
your writing is very attractive and seductive.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Parky. Seductive writing? I doubt that. Heartfelt and truthful .. read more
I quite like the rhythm this one holds throughout and the message of having the strength to let go of heartache and just move on is a good message - I think too many people allow their heartache to linger far too long so that it becomes unhealthy and all consuming. A successful experiement if I do say so myself :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Carolynn. It's been a while! I appreciate your thoughts on this.. read more
A title must stand on its own the rest is a very good poem

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Robert. I appreciate your words. Welcome to my poetic domain.

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