Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

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My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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To live, serve, and die with no regret whatsoever or had I knows...what an honourable bee that was. A befitting title "Last buzz..." it spoke of death not in the usual sad, heartbreaking way but in an accomplished, fulfilled and peaceful way which makes it really fun to read.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. I appreciate the kind words.



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It's amazing how the drones obey their queen. thanks for this wonderful poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Roxane. Quite amazing the synchronicity they share is indeed. I.. read more
To live, serve, and die with no regret whatsoever or had I knows...what an honourable bee that was. A befitting title "Last buzz..." it spoke of death not in the usual sad, heartbreaking way but in an accomplished, fulfilled and peaceful way which makes it really fun to read.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. I appreciate the kind words.
Wow, a simple idea of life and bees transformed into this great one.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the kind words.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

9 Months Ago

Love to read poetry daily. You're welcome.
I'm a fan of bees Doodley, and a fan of well metered, rhyming story poems as well. What a wonderful story! I put my hand over my heart as I read about the brave soldier, giving his life to protect his queen and his home, the way all good soldiers are sworn to do. And WHAT A BATTLE! Raiders and vanquishing and honeyed halls; epic! And his dying words spoke of love for his queen

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dani. I appreciate your kind words on this piece. Happy Holiday.. read more
The way you contrived this perfectly rhymed poem on dauntless & duty bound bee and his queen is truly cherish-able. Valiant till death and his purpose was served. Keep them coming :-)
Nothing can be more pleasant than this. That motivating touch that I look in poems always lies here in your writing…I missed reading your poems, Doodley! Your writing doesn’t seem to have any saturation point. It keeps getting better every time you read. A very heart rending piece!



Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Welcome back! A very kind review for this piece.
Given that bees are vanishing, I was a little primed for such a message, but you took this (delightfully) in a completely different direction. Nice rhyme & rhythm to show us the natural bee lifecycle, personifying the narrator bee with abundant personality. Good job busting thru the writing block.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, BG. I appreciate the kind review.
Wow, this is beautiful. It's so heartfelt and I honestly want to cry.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lonely Shadow. I appreciate your read and kind words.
Lonely Shadow

10 Months Ago

You write so formally!
amazingly written keep it up !!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, cherryblossom. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
A simple poem - if I wrote this I'd be feeling very chuffed with myself Doodley.
I see bees land on my sill all the time (I think it's because South facing) and they are genuinely so 'out of breath' that their whole body heaves - some just up and die there and then and it saddens me.
If humans worked have as hard ...well you know the rest.

Oh by the way this reminded me somewhat of the amazing song (I think in lyrics - sadly, other peoples - so skint...lol) - 'The Queen And The Soldier' by Suzanne Vega.
Here's a link to it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-I_7M_JeSoc

Once more - thank you and this is cool.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

You're welcome Doodley. It's a pleasure. Thank you.
D. Connolly

10 Months Ago

Tony, if you can get to them and you think of it, give them some sugar water. :)
Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

wow ! - I never even knew. Like, just pour some beside them or use a q-tip soaked in it. I'd hate to.. read more

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