Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

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My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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A simple poem - if I wrote this I'd be feeling very chuffed with myself Doodley.
I see bees land on my sill all the time (I think it's because South facing) and they are genuinely so 'out of breath' that their whole body heaves - some just up and die there and then and it saddens me.
If humans worked have as hard ...well you know the rest.

Oh by the way this reminded me somewhat of the amazing song (I think in lyrics - sadly, other peoples - so skint...lol) - 'The Queen And The Soldier' by Suzanne Vega.
Here's a link to it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-I_7M_JeSoc

Once more - thank you and this is cool.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

2 Months Ago

You're welcome Doodley. It's a pleasure. Thank you.
D. Connolly

1 Month Ago

Tony, if you can get to them and you think of it, give them some sugar water. :)
Tony Jordan

1 Month Ago

wow ! - I never even knew. Like, just pour some beside them or use a q-tip soaked in it. I'd hate to.. read more



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Wow, a simple idea of life and bees transformed into this great one.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the kind words.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

1 Month Ago

Love to read poetry daily. You're welcome.
I'm a fan of bees Doodley, and a fan of well metered, rhyming story poems as well. What a wonderful story! I put my hand over my heart as I read about the brave soldier, giving his life to protect his queen and his home, the way all good soldiers are sworn to do. And WHAT A BATTLE! Raiders and vanquishing and honeyed halls; epic! And his dying words spoke of love for his queen

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dani. I appreciate your kind words on this piece. Happy Holiday.. read more
The way you contrived this perfectly rhymed poem on dauntless & duty bound bee and his queen is truly cherish-able. Valiant till death and his purpose was served. Keep them coming :-)
Nothing can be more pleasant than this. That motivating touch that I look in poems always lies here in your writing…I missed reading your poems, Doodley! Your writing doesn’t seem to have any saturation point. It keeps getting better every time you read. A very heart rending piece!



Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Welcome back! A very kind review for this piece.
Given that bees are vanishing, I was a little primed for such a message, but you took this (delightfully) in a completely different direction. Nice rhyme & rhythm to show us the natural bee lifecycle, personifying the narrator bee with abundant personality. Good job busting thru the writing block.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, BG. I appreciate the kind review.
Wow, this is beautiful. It's so heartfelt and I honestly want to cry.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lonely Shadow. I appreciate your read and kind words.
Lonely Shadow

2 Months Ago

You write so formally!
amazingly written keep it up !!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, cherryblossom. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
A simple poem - if I wrote this I'd be feeling very chuffed with myself Doodley.
I see bees land on my sill all the time (I think it's because South facing) and they are genuinely so 'out of breath' that their whole body heaves - some just up and die there and then and it saddens me.
If humans worked have as hard ...well you know the rest.

Oh by the way this reminded me somewhat of the amazing song (I think in lyrics - sadly, other peoples - so skint...lol) - 'The Queen And The Soldier' by Suzanne Vega.
Here's a link to it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-I_7M_JeSoc

Once more - thank you and this is cool.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

2 Months Ago

You're welcome Doodley. It's a pleasure. Thank you.
D. Connolly

1 Month Ago

Tony, if you can get to them and you think of it, give them some sugar water. :)
Tony Jordan

1 Month Ago

wow ! - I never even knew. Like, just pour some beside them or use a q-tip soaked in it. I'd hate to.. read more
An artistic apiarist's elegy. Highly original and scientifically poetic. Loved it.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Norman. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
"Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee."

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day."

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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