Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

"
My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Zoe
Regardless of how aggressive they become when meddled with, those creatures are a wonder in themselves! Working with unimaginable coordination. I know this isn't much relevant to the the theme of the poem but this kind of reminds me of a queen bee fact. A queen bee does not die if she stings you while the other bees do die when they sting.That can be taken in various ways I suppose...lol.
This piece amazingly showcases the sense of responsibility in worker bees...which most humans lack. Great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Your thoughts do reflect the theme of the poem; the worker.. read more
Zoe

1 Year Ago

Ah, I thought there was some other reason behind its death.
You are welcome



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I've been needing my fix of Doodley poetry, and it took me a bit to find something of yours I haven't already read. I like this one. It's more simple than your usual writing, as you mention in the author's note, but there's a whimsicality to this poem that makes it fun to read. It's fast-paced and easy to read (always a nice thing for a simple mind like mine), yet it is not lacking in clever writing and apt metaphors. I had a friend in school who was hyper-concerned with the welfare of the honey bee, but I can't claim to have thought as much about them as she did. So I appreciate this poem that gives a hypothetical but realistic insight into the mind of a particularly poetic bee. I knew bees died after stinging, but I never thought about how that might feel. If it's a slow drain 'till death, as you've written, then I feel very sorry for our buzzy friends. If only we humans were as loyal to our leaders as these bees. Very nice write, as always. Simple by comparison, yes, but great in its own way.

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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. This was just a simple back to basics poem to get the.. read more
Honey bees don’t die so quick so this one must have put up a fight for what it believed in- what wonderful heart to protect and to die for it- soft and tender full of love- wonderful words🌹

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. I appreciate the time and kind words.
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

1 Year Ago

Always a pleasure and I love your work🌹
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Zoe
Regardless of how aggressive they become when meddled with, those creatures are a wonder in themselves! Working with unimaginable coordination. I know this isn't much relevant to the the theme of the poem but this kind of reminds me of a queen bee fact. A queen bee does not die if she stings you while the other bees do die when they sting.That can be taken in various ways I suppose...lol.
This piece amazingly showcases the sense of responsibility in worker bees...which most humans lack. Great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Your thoughts do reflect the theme of the poem; the worker.. read more
Zoe

1 Year Ago

Ah, I thought there was some other reason behind its death.
You are welcome
I needed to read a good write to make my day, I decided to read my friends. When I came across this piece, i felt my lost muse return. Thank you for the inspiring write. This piece would make a great play and dialogue too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mirror. I am glad this one inspired you. I appreciate the kind .. read more
Ah, this is quite refreshing! The simple rhyme and cadence of this poem combined with its humour really elevates it to something far beyond just "a simple poem to push past the writer's block". I love this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Abdul. This was just a writer's block defeater, hence the simpl.. read more
It's amazing how the drones obey their queen. thanks for this wonderful poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Roxane. Quite amazing the synchronicity they share is indeed. I.. read more
To live, serve, and die with no regret whatsoever or had I knows...what an honourable bee that was. A befitting title "Last buzz..." it spoke of death not in the usual sad, heartbreaking way but in an accomplished, fulfilled and peaceful way which makes it really fun to read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. I appreciate the kind words.
Wow, a simple idea of life and bees transformed into this great one.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate the kind words.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

2 Years Ago

Love to read poetry daily. You're welcome.

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