Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

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My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



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Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Zoe
Regardless of how aggressive they become when meddled with, those creatures are a wonder in themselves! Working with unimaginable coordination. I know this isn't much relevant to the the theme of the poem but this kind of reminds me of a queen bee fact. A queen bee does not die if she stings you while the other bees do die when they sting.That can be taken in various ways I suppose...lol.
This piece amazingly showcases the sense of responsibility in worker bees...which most humans lack. Great job!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Your thoughts do reflect the theme of the poem; the worker.. read more
Zoe

9 Months Ago

Ah, I thought there was some other reason behind its death.
You are welcome



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The way you contrived this perfectly rhymed poem on dauntless & duty bound bee and his queen is truly cherish-able. Valiant till death and his purpose was served. Keep them coming :-)
Nothing can be more pleasant than this. That motivating touch that I look in poems always lies here in your writing…I missed reading your poems, Doodley! Your writing doesn’t seem to have any saturation point. It keeps getting better every time you read. A very heart rending piece!



Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Welcome back! A very kind review for this piece.
Given that bees are vanishing, I was a little primed for such a message, but you took this (delightfully) in a completely different direction. Nice rhyme & rhythm to show us the natural bee lifecycle, personifying the narrator bee with abundant personality. Good job busting thru the writing block.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, BG. I appreciate the kind review.
Wow, this is beautiful. It's so heartfelt and I honestly want to cry.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lonely Shadow. I appreciate your read and kind words.
Lonely Shadow

1 Year Ago

You write so formally!
amazingly written keep it up !!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, cherryblossom. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
A simple poem - if I wrote this I'd be feeling very chuffed with myself Doodley.
I see bees land on my sill all the time (I think it's because South facing) and they are genuinely so 'out of breath' that their whole body heaves - some just up and die there and then and it saddens me.
If humans worked have as hard ...well you know the rest.

Oh by the way this reminded me somewhat of the amazing song (I think in lyrics - sadly, other peoples - so skint...lol) - 'The Queen And The Soldier' by Suzanne Vega.
Here's a link to it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-I_7M_JeSoc

Once more - thank you and this is cool.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

2 Years Ago

You're welcome Doodley. It's a pleasure. Thank you.
D Connolly

1 Year Ago

Tony, if you can get to them and you think of it, give them some sugar water. :)
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

wow ! - I never even knew. Like, just pour some beside them or use a q-tip soaked in it. I'd hate to.. read more
An artistic apiarist's elegy. Highly original and scientifically poetic. Loved it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Norman. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
"Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee."

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day."

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. So memorable and powerful lines which I can't get enough from like honey which is a cure like your poetry....An excellent poem with great scientific truths in it...:)...............

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. Very generous appraisal for such a simple piece. I apprec.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

Well deserving. You are welcome. ...:::)))))
A superb write as always doodley and chilling in the fact several species of bees are on the endangered list as we write.No bees, no polination, death to mankind. Again a lovely write out of writer's block, heaven help us when you are not suffering the curse!! lol

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Doodley

2 Years Ago

Various* Haha. Awful typo!
andrew mitchell

2 Years Ago

I did like carious! :-)
Doodley

2 Years Ago

Hahaha. The finger slipped!

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