Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

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My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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It never fails to amaze me, how well organized and industrious this wonderful insect is and how loyal to their queen. Now here is a poem, that captures their essence completely and lends such a human touch to them. "For now to a petal and my death will I lay" so sad, yet the queen will not lack for such loving little servants. A poem with perfect rhyming verses, telling the story with such flair. Enjoyed and appreciated so much!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. Just a simple piece this was. Written to break writers b.. read more



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Wow, this is beautiful. It's so heartfelt and I honestly want to cry.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lonely Shadow. I appreciate your read and kind words.
Lonely Shadow

11 Months Ago

You write so formally!
amazingly written keep it up !!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, cherryblossom. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
A simple poem - if I wrote this I'd be feeling very chuffed with myself Doodley.
I see bees land on my sill all the time (I think it's because South facing) and they are genuinely so 'out of breath' that their whole body heaves - some just up and die there and then and it saddens me.
If humans worked have as hard ...well you know the rest.

Oh by the way this reminded me somewhat of the amazing song (I think in lyrics - sadly, other peoples - so skint...lol) - 'The Queen And The Soldier' by Suzanne Vega.
Here's a link to it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-I_7M_JeSoc

Once more - thank you and this is cool.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

You're welcome Doodley. It's a pleasure. Thank you.
D. Connolly

11 Months Ago

Tony, if you can get to them and you think of it, give them some sugar water. :)
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

wow ! - I never even knew. Like, just pour some beside them or use a q-tip soaked in it. I'd hate to.. read more
An artistic apiarist's elegy. Highly original and scientifically poetic. Loved it.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Norman. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
"Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee."

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day."

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. So memorable and powerful lines which I can't get enough from like honey which is a cure like your poetry....An excellent poem with great scientific truths in it...:)...............

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. Very generous appraisal for such a simple piece. I apprec.. read more
Sami Khalil

11 Months Ago

Well deserving. You are welcome. ...:::)))))
A superb write as always doodley and chilling in the fact several species of bees are on the endangered list as we write.No bees, no polination, death to mankind. Again a lovely write out of writer's block, heaven help us when you are not suffering the curse!! lol

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Various* Haha. Awful typo!
andrew mitchell

11 Months Ago

I did like carious! :-)
Doodley

11 Months Ago

Hahaha. The finger slipped!
One kiss and death. Maybe a too fast life?
"And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,"
I like the above ending and the tale told in your poem. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. I appreciate your continual support of my writing.
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
dear Doodley.... your poetry is amazing... as though you sit at a baby grand ebony piano with ivory keys and touch upon the most tender feelings.
truly, Pat

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pat. I really appreciate your kind words. I try to write with e.. read more

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