Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

Last Buzz of the Honey Bee

A Poem by Doodley
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Valiant till death.

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My Queen, My Queen, the task is done,
Your kingdom is safe, the honeyed halls still run,
Your fountains of gold shall forever flow free,
And long shall you reign over the heart of this bee.


The raiders are vanquished, defeated and bled,
Have turned on their heels, deserted and fled,
Fear no longer in your heart the threat of their King,
Hear only the buzzing of triumph as we sing.


But alas now my Queen, bad tidings I bring,
For in the heat of the battle I gave all my sting,
The last of my life force is ebbing away,
And for me this shall be my climactic day.


And so with this last buzz I bid you adieu,
One final drink of nectar will see my life through,
It's been a pleasure, my Queen, to serve you this way,
For now to a petal and my death will I lay.

© 2016 Doodley



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Doodley
Just a simple poem to push past the writer's block.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Zoe
Regardless of how aggressive they become when meddled with, those creatures are a wonder in themselves! Working with unimaginable coordination. I know this isn't much relevant to the the theme of the poem but this kind of reminds me of a queen bee fact. A queen bee does not die if she stings you while the other bees do die when they sting.That can be taken in various ways I suppose...lol.
This piece amazingly showcases the sense of responsibility in worker bees...which most humans lack. Great job!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Your thoughts do reflect the theme of the poem; the worker.. read more
Zoe

1 Month Ago

Ah, I thought there was some other reason behind its death.
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what a cool way to discuss stuff which isnt always biology. you my favourite here.
keep it up doodley.


Posted 1 Year Ago


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Jane 18

1 Year Ago

yes im not. i like physics though.
Doodley

1 Year Ago

And i hate physics! Haha.
Jane 18

1 Year Ago

i think you should give it a try
I think that block must be gone as this is very well thought out and written. Love what bees do but hate their sting. Nice write. Valentine

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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Valentine. I appreciate your kind words.
This poem carries a beautiful message of duty, honor, loyalty. It is very obvious that the days have come to an end when he is no longer needed to serve the lady. I see the death of this bee as a liberating one... An opportunity for the bee to royally relieve himself of his duties, his end may be the beginning of a more worthwhile life, an unknown one, but still - something to look forward and thus, his words are not of the end of his soul, but just an end to his current life, duty, affection, admiration, and love. Lovely one, Doodley.

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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sati. A very kind review. Welcome to my poetic domain.
This is a beautiful story simple and perfectly rhymed. The loyalty of the dutibound serving unto his last breath moves us in the end.
Some verses like " the last of my life force is moving away..... My climactic day" and " it has been ...........will I lay" fill us with immense empathy with your buzzing bee.
Here I see a very delicately presented valiance driving straight into our hearts. Very nicely crafted.
What a delicate push to the writer' s block.
So, can we expect another one soon?

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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bala. I appreciate your kind words. And yes, another poem shall.. read more
and she would have killed him anyway...don't queen bees do that...so this is better...he dies on his own feeling he has done his duty....very much a terrific allegory...humans have this same pattern quite often...the male kills himself trying to protect his mate...

nicely done...

j.

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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. An impressive review as always. I am not sure if the Que.. read more
Very nicely rhymed Doodley! Loved it! You told a whole story and the rhyme and rhythm were perrrrrrfect!! Thanks for sharing this poetic ode to a valiant bee :)

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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. I appreciate your time and kind words. The revoluti.. read more

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