By the River, Acheron

By the River, Acheron

A Poem by Doodley
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Words.

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She walks through Elysian fields and wild grass plain,
With footfalls hushed silent to conceal all her pain,
Of the emptiness she feels as she treads on the Earth,
And battles her demons of failing self-worth.

For the flame in her soul has flickered and died,
And her lightbulb of existence, it's fuse has been fried,
All the love in her heart has bled and beat out,
Now it breeds only darkness, self-pity and doubt.

No words can embolden, no wisdom can abide,
She drowns in her sorrow that swells up inside,
And churns out no emotions from her depths full of stones,
Just a neverending ice flow that chills through her bones.

Into the forest of Stagnation she passes with ease,
Enveloped in the darkness by the canopy of trees,
Which rustle their disapproval in a restless wind sway,
And watch with leavened eyes as she goes on her way.

Beyond the depressional curve of a lonely, small hill,
She comes to a halt and is suddenly still,
For the River Acheron glistening in all of its fame,
Stood with welcoming embankments and called out her name.

In a trance of oblivion she edged to its banks,
While in the abyss of her mind she gave a soul-less small thanks,
For at long last her suffering can be laid down to bed,
All the pain, heartache, shame and the dread.

With a deeply drawn breath she closes her eyes,
Steps into the menacing cool stillness up to her thighs,
Lets the flow of the ripples pass over her head,
And feels the thrum of a life that she once thought was dead.

Like a sound from a nightmare in childhood dreams,
Did the forest erupt into a cacophony of screams!
All nature divine and the beasts from within,
Raged violently at the river for committing such a sin!

Broken from her trance by the strength of their roar,
She fought with the river and struggled ashore,
Her essence of being had surged in her strife,
And she no longer wanted to forego her life.

For beneath the surface of the river in its malevolent glare,
Into the eyes of a Sibyl did she happen to stare,
And her future and destiny did she behold,
And the pathway to redemption was she foretold.

By the River, Acheron, she sat down and wept,
As the forest, exhausted, settled and slept,
And a comforting breeze enclosed her shoulders and shook,
And suppressed the seduction of the babbling brook.

As she sat perched by the river in peace and alone,
Her eyes glimmered hope for a new life of her own,
And a smile creased her face in the wilting dusk gloam,
And her thoughts turned to one place, and that place was, home.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A story poem. Of Acheron, River of myth and reality.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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This is powerful stuff Doodley. One which is away from your comfort zone (if you have one), and you tread on very strong turf dealing with a woman who may have lost the will to live, love and hope. The strength of this work comes from the way you have built the narrative. One can visualize a trough, which plummets towards an abyss and just when all seemed hopeless your protagonist finds revitality and as readers and hopefuls of life we are saved.
Your works are always superlative, and it is a tribute to the very spirit of writing that you poetry comes up, enlivening people who would seek succour and strength from your poetry.

I would give this five stars and look forward with great keenness to your next.

Yours faithfully,
A Big Admirer.

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. As always, your review is brilliant and takes the poem.. read more



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Zoe
This is awesome! The story was told in such a beautiful and emotional way, it just shook the reader. The rhyme scheme is perfect. I loved everything about it. Another wonder jotted down by your pen!

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. I am glad you enjoyed this piece. I appreciate your kind w.. read more
Zoe

2 Months Ago

My pleasure
This is simply wow.. I fall short of expressing the range of thoughts passing through my mind while reading this artistic piece!!
Though that last line hit home! Just amazing :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Doodley

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Krutika. I appreciate your time and very kind words.
This is the best piece of writing I've read so far this year. It's so beautiful it brings a tear to my eyes. To tell such a story in flawless rhyme is something to be admired.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Doodley

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. Very kind thoughts and words for this one. I appreciate .. read more
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mou
it is so lively write that creates a visualization itself..starting from the state of mind of a girl and then a slow transition wrapped with the beauty of nature..it is truly a profound write and thanks Doodley for sharing with us

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate your kind words on this piece.
"Into the forest of Stagnation she passes with ease,
Enveloped in the darkness by the canopy of trees,
Which rustle their disapproval in a restless wind sway,
And watch with leavened eyes as she goes on her way."--my favorite part.
I admire reading story poetry and it is something I do often in my own work.
Building scenes and creating fiction with reality in mind.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I am an afficionado of the story poem format as you can .. read more
Josie E. Cook M. A.

7 Months Ago

:)
Always enjoy reading good poetry!
Doodley,
"By the river acheron" lends its voice to so many all around including ourselves who may just have given up or feel like it sometimes. That is what was in my mind throughout. Also I love the painting here as well- this old style distinguished poem! Thankyou again for your writing! blessings to you Kathy

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. I appreciate your kind words. Happy New Year.
Wow, I love how each stanza engaged into one another, and the realization of the girl that home is what'll help her with her battling of sadness and insecurity. I loved this style a lot, thanks so much for sharing this.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Nini. I appreciate your kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.. read more

What a deep and an extremely beautiful write !

The whole journey of a woman, the way she started out on giving up her life after loosing hope and then the realization strikes taking everything back to normalcy is very well visualized and presented here.
The way you use those elements of life and nature so delicately is something really commendable. Rhyme..rhythm everything is great as always. All the 12 stanzas are equally amazing.
This is damn too good write, Doodley. You have written a piece that flows so effortlessly. And it must have taken some good amount of effort on your part to write this notable write..this is truly precious. Kudos to that effort !
I feel honored just by reading and reviewing your work.
There is so much to learn from you. Sunbae, you are the best :-) :-)


Posted 8 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hoonbae. I appreciate the depth of your kind review. This piece.. read more
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Gorthi Manasvini

7 Months Ago

I know nothing is hard for you, Doodley ! You are a super writer..
Beautiful! I love how you describe and make the world seem tangible.

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lonely Shadow. Very kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
Lonely Shadow

8 Months Ago

Poetry is hard for me.
I think you capture a mythological, yet still very relatable and powerful, vibe really well in this piece. I'm very impressed by this. Everything about this poem is so high quality, from the flow, the imagery, the message and the rhyme scheme. You seem to be a professional at writing, if this is anything to go by! I hope I'm this proficient at writing one day. Fantastic performance! :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, DoormanDan (great name!). I appreciate your very kind words on .. read more
DoormanDan

8 Months Ago

And I'm glad I stumbled across it. Thanks for the compliment on my name. Even though it is meant t.. read more

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