By the River, Acheron

By the River, Acheron

A Poem by Doodley
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Truth as fiction.

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She walks through Elysian fields and wild grass plain,
With footfalls hushed silent to conceal all her pain,
Of the emptiness she feels as she treads on the Earth,
And battles her demons of failing self-worth.

For the flame in her soul has flickered and died,
And her lightbulb of existence, it's fuse has been fried,
All the love in her heart has bled and beat out,
Now it breeds only darkness, self-pity and doubt.

No words can embolden, no wisdom can abide,
She drowns in her sorrow that swells up inside,
And churns out no emotions from her depths full of stones,
Just a neverending ice flow that chills through her bones.

Into the forest of Stagnation she passes with ease,
Enveloped in the darkness by the canopy of trees,
Which rustle their disapproval in a restless wind sway,
And watch with leavened eyes as she goes on her way.

Beyond the depressional curve of a lonely, small hill,
She comes to a halt and is suddenly still,
For the River Acheron glistening in all of its fame,
Stood with welcoming embankments and called out her name.

In a trance of oblivion she edged to its banks,
While in the abyss of her mind she gave a soul-less small thanks,
For at long last her suffering can be laid down to bed,
All the pain, heartache, shame and the dread.

With a deeply drawn breath she closes her eyes,
Steps into the menacing cool stillness up to her thighs,
Lets the flow of the ripples pass over her head,
And feels the thrum of a life that she once thought was dead.

Like a sound from a nightmare in childhood dreams,
Did the forest erupt into a cacophony of screams!
All nature divine and the beasts from within,
Raged violently at the river for committing such a sin!

Broken from her trance by the strength of their roar,
She fought with the river and struggled ashore,
Her essence of being had surged in her strife,
And she no longer wanted to forego her life.

For beneath the surface of the river in its malevolent glare,
Into the eyes of a Sibyl did she happen to stare,
And her future and destiny did she behold,
And the pathway to redemption was she foretold.

By the River, Acheron, she sat down and wept,
As the forest, exhausted, settled and slept,
And a comforting breeze enclosed her shoulders and shook,
And suppressed the seduction of the babbling brook.

As she sat perched by the river in peace and alone,
Her eyes glimmered hope for a new life of her own,
And a smile creased her face in the wilting dusk gloam,
And her thoughts turned to one place, and that place was, home.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A story poem. Of Acheron, River of myth and reality.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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This is powerful stuff Doodley. One which is away from your comfort zone (if you have one), and you tread on very strong turf dealing with a woman who may have lost the will to live, love and hope. The strength of this work comes from the way you have built the narrative. One can visualize a trough, which plummets towards an abyss and just when all seemed hopeless your protagonist finds revitality and as readers and hopefuls of life we are saved.
Your works are always superlative, and it is a tribute to the very spirit of writing that you poetry comes up, enlivening people who would seek succour and strength from your poetry.

I would give this five stars and look forward with great keenness to your next.

Yours faithfully,
A Big Admirer.

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. As always, your review is brilliant and takes the poem.. read more



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Doodley, letting go is a harder thing when you are consumed with grief. What a great story of letting go of all and then to be lifted by hope or destiny and ready for life to begin again. The phases of life we must face through many hardships. I found this to be empowering I am ready for chapter two.
Bravo! to you.

Sheer Terror

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Doodley

18 Hours Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Terry. I appreciate the comments and praise. And this poem is j.. read more
A big WOW escaped my mouth after reading this!
One of the best poems I have read on this site!
Captivating imagery and a mystifying spell.
A huge thanks for sharing this:)
I think you should get this published in print.


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Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Neetha. Extremely kind words of praise for this piece. I am gla.. read more
Wow! I am utterly swept away in this great tale. You really have a beautiful style and this story was ancient yet modern. Very well done and thank you for sharing it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, LK. I appreciate the kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
oh my god.
this was perfectly written. loved the words and the imagery i was able to create. this was beautifully written. the whole concept as per what i had brought in my piece ( which you has achieved so professionally), i must say this should be a classic. id be happy to read more of your stuff.

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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pia. A bit of a relief to see another writer enjoy this piece. .. read more
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Zoe
This is awesome! The story was told in such a beautiful and emotional way, it just shook the reader. The rhyme scheme is perfect. I loved everything about it. Another wonder jotted down by your pen!

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. I am glad you enjoyed this piece. I appreciate your kind w.. read more
Zoe

4 Months Ago

My pleasure
This is simply wow.. I fall short of expressing the range of thoughts passing through my mind while reading this artistic piece!!
Though that last line hit home! Just amazing :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Krutika. I appreciate your time and very kind words.
This is the best piece of writing I've read so far this year. It's so beautiful it brings a tear to my eyes. To tell such a story in flawless rhyme is something to be admired.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. Very kind thoughts and words for this one. I appreciate .. read more
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mou
it is so lively write that creates a visualization itself..starting from the state of mind of a girl and then a slow transition wrapped with the beauty of nature..it is truly a profound write and thanks Doodley for sharing with us

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate your kind words on this piece.
"Into the forest of Stagnation she passes with ease,
Enveloped in the darkness by the canopy of trees,
Which rustle their disapproval in a restless wind sway,
And watch with leavened eyes as she goes on her way."--my favorite part.
I admire reading story poetry and it is something I do often in my own work.
Building scenes and creating fiction with reality in mind.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I am an afficionado of the story poem format as you can .. read more
Josie E. Cook M. A.

9 Months Ago

:)
Always enjoy reading good poetry!

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