By the River, Acheron

By the River, Acheron

A Poem by Doodley
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Truth as fiction.

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She walks through Elysian fields and wild grass plain,
With footfalls hushed silent to conceal all her pain,
Of the emptiness she feels as she treads on the Earth,
And battles her demons of failing self-worth.

For the flame in her soul has flickered and died,
And her lightbulb of existence, it's fuse has been fried,
All the love in her heart has bled and beat out,
Now it breeds only darkness, self-pity and doubt.

No words can embolden, no wisdom can abide,
She drowns in her sorrow that swells up inside,
And churns out no emotions from her depths full of stones,
Just a neverending ice flow that chills through her bones.

Into the forest of Stagnation she passes with ease,
Enveloped in the darkness by the canopy of trees,
Which rustle their disapproval in a restless wind sway,
And watch with leavened eyes as she goes on her way.

Beyond the depressional curve of a lonely, small hill,
She comes to a halt and is suddenly still,
For the River Acheron glistening in all of its fame,
Stood with welcoming embankments and called out her name.

In a trance of oblivion she edged to its banks,
While in the abyss of her mind she gave a soul-less small thanks,
For at long last her suffering can be laid down to bed,
All the pain, heartache, shame and the dread.

With a deeply drawn breath she closes her eyes,
Steps into the menacing cool stillness up to her thighs,
Lets the flow of the ripples pass over her head,
And feels the thrum of a life that she once thought was dead.

Like a sound from a nightmare in childhood dreams,
Did the forest erupt into a cacophony of screams!
All nature divine and the beasts from within,
Raged violently at the river for committing such a sin!

Broken from her trance by the strength of their roar,
She fought with the river and struggled ashore,
Her essence of being had surged in her strife,
And she no longer wanted to forego her life.

For beneath the surface of the river in its malevolent glare,
Into the eyes of a Sibyl did she happen to stare,
And her future and destiny did she behold,
And the pathway to redemption was she foretold.

By the River, Acheron, she sat down and wept,
As the forest, exhausted, settled and slept,
And a comforting breeze enclosed her shoulders and shook,
And suppressed the seduction of the babbling brook.

As she sat perched by the river in peace and alone,
Her eyes glimmered hope for a new life of her own,
And a smile creased her face in the wilting dusk gloam,
And her thoughts turned to one place, and that place was, home.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A Narrative poem. Of Acheron, River of myth and reality.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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This is powerful stuff Doodley. One which is away from your comfort zone (if you have one), and you tread on very strong turf dealing with a woman who may have lost the will to live, love and hope. The strength of this work comes from the way you have built the narrative. One can visualize a trough, which plummets towards an abyss and just when all seemed hopeless your protagonist finds revitality and as readers and hopefuls of life we are saved.
Your works are always superlative, and it is a tribute to the very spirit of writing that you poetry comes up, enlivening people who would seek succour and strength from your poetry.

I would give this five stars and look forward with great keenness to your next.

Yours faithfully,
A Big Admirer.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. As always, your review is brilliant and takes the poem.. read more



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Being fairly new to the title of a "poet", you're certainly very much an inspiration. I must say, I adorn the usage of anomalous vocabulary, as it helps me excel in the field of writing itself. I've learned quite a few new things, and in the nearing future i'd love to perhaps inspire you to feature the word Lachrymose in one of your poems, or perhaps its own title.

~Your newest admirer,
Cynical

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Cynical. I appreciate your kind words. I will try to accomodate.. read more
My goodness, a poem with a story that has a cadence AND rhymes?? Those are my absolute favorites. I love it! Wonderful story and very well told

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, D. Connolly. Perhaps read the poems of David Lewis Paget on thi.. read more
D. Connolly

11 Months Ago

He is one of my favorites, thank-you! :)
A amazing tale written my friend.
"For beneath the surface of the river in its malevolent glare,
Into the eyes of a Sibyl did she happen to stare,
And her future and destiny did she behold,
And the pathway to redemption was she foretold."
The above lines were my favorite. When you know you journey. Hard place to grasp. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Coyote. I appreciate your time and very kind thoughts on this p.. read more
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
this is a very moving tributary poem. see what i did there? tribute and tributary.
who is mrc?
anyway back to poem, it is moving and has a cascading flow to it, i like it, reminds me of the river next to my aunt's michigan house.
keep writin u make a girl cry.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

The matter was settled. I noticed your support. I thank you sincerely for that.
Jane 18

11 Months Ago

no worries. i was angry. she even messaged me, almost like a blackmail.
Doodley

11 Months Ago

Sorry about that. True character comes forth in adversity.
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Gee
Wow, brilliant Doodley, must be your best yet. One for me to envy and you to be proud of.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gee. I appreciate your kind review. I am sure this one is up th.. read more
Gee

11 Months Ago

I doubt it, but you might well be a while breaking through to get onto the next level. Think yoursel.. read more
Argh!! So impressive Doodley!!! I love the way you tell stories in your poems. Ridiculously beautiful, mythical, lyrical stories too. Reminded me of little of Ophelia except your character was happily brought to her senses by a dip in the watery depths. As usual top notch rhyming and great meter too. Long live the revolution!!!! Super poem!!!! Thanks for sharing! :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. Very, very flattered by your kind words about this .. read more
Andronicus

11 Months Ago

Viva le revolucion!
Doodley this immediately recalled to me the sad, beautiful and ethereal Waterhouse painting 'Lady of Shalott' - I imagine it triggered that memory because it has those qualities too.
Nicely penned!


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tony. I had a google of that Waterhouse painting to see what yo.. read more
I love this piece! It's beautiful.
The flow and imagery is so well-crafted.
The story poem format is perfect...your words carry the reader into this imaginary world, swirling around us and transporting us into the heart of the story. Very well done!

Posted 11 Months Ago


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Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, ReedWrite. Very flattered by your excellent review of this poem.. read more
Such an old Worldly Write Doodley, the lost scrolls of Atlantis, a hidden chapter from Lord of the Rings. With sadness comes enchantment in this tale, Brilliant!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. Old wordly indeed. Inspired by the river of lost souls .. read more
This is powerful stuff Doodley. One which is away from your comfort zone (if you have one), and you tread on very strong turf dealing with a woman who may have lost the will to live, love and hope. The strength of this work comes from the way you have built the narrative. One can visualize a trough, which plummets towards an abyss and just when all seemed hopeless your protagonist finds revitality and as readers and hopefuls of life we are saved.
Your works are always superlative, and it is a tribute to the very spirit of writing that you poetry comes up, enlivening people who would seek succour and strength from your poetry.

I would give this five stars and look forward with great keenness to your next.

Yours faithfully,
A Big Admirer.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. As always, your review is brilliant and takes the poem.. read more

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