Lachrymose Love

Lachrymose Love

A Poem by Doodley
"

Keats whispered in my ear.

"
For thee is there no more tender sight,
Than to stand upon the precipice of love at night,
With beating heart held in wistful hands,
And stare across seas to thy beloveds lands?

Oh! To be bathed in hope from the luminous light,
That reflects off the waves, so forever bright!
As ye affix thy gaze on a wandering star,
And follow its journey to thy love from afar!

As ye stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,
And its cries of its longing traverse infinite seas,
Guided by the caress of the night mistress breeze.

It is a Lachrymose Love that it sends off to thou,
Across oceans and glaciers and mountain tear snow,
To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam.

And upon the lonely precipice ye stand there and wait,
For a diastolic love tune that will seal thy fate,
Shall that heart grow its own wings and soar into sky?,
Or fade into silence, to shrivel and die?

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Written in a moment of personal Romanticism.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Doodley Doodley Doodley.. This one is so sick! I am feeling the vibe of this piece, especially at the moment. Well written. Well said. This longing and this realization of emotion is stated with a lot of depth and power. In case you haven't noticed, (Knives put away, I SWEAR~!) ...power poetry is my fave. If it's not powerful... it's not poetry!!
Good job Doodley.
..Misty

Posted 9 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

1 Day Ago

No.... o.o My photography has taken off and I have been studying for my Dutch exams. lol
Doodley

1 Day Ago

Well Done. Good luck with the exams. And his book is a real doorstopper!
M. L. F.

1 Day Ago

Aww thanks!! I will check it out after exams end Nov.. Great to talk again Doodley :)



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Zoe
You might be one of Keats' rebirths. Amazingly penned! Hell, I didn't even know the meaning of lachrymose xD. Vocabulary was...literally other-worldly. Rhyming was awesome. And the story...ooh...ethereal. As always, loved it!!
PS: Don't worry about that I.O.U. You're not indebted. Lol. Your poems are next-level. Can't help but read them.


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Wonderfully kind words. This was written in response to a .. read more
Zoe

1 Month Ago

No, don't worry, I'll send no henchmen xD. And you're most welcome!
I love the punch behind this piece, the text is so empowering GREAT WORK, I love it when people aren't afraid to use proper English in their poetry/ writing. Love it keep writing and Stay Zen.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, London. Yes, Archaic Elizabethan language is lovely to read and.. read more
Your words are soft and romantic with a touch of sadness...so lovely. The last verse is my favorite and the perfect ending for this work of art. :) Julie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Julie. I appreciate your time and kind words.
Lovely poem. Powerful and perfectly written

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mikayla. I appreciate your kind words.
A well crafted piece of romantic poetry with some great personal touches. Loved the references to the 'up and down' beats of the heart (spoken like a horse doctor!) and especially 'night mistress breeze'. That phrase conjures up images of warm breezes and flowing soft folds of fabric as a woman stands at night looking, with forlorn hope, out to sea.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, John. I appreciate the kind words.
Wow! Powerful poetry! Great crafting I'm quite taken with this. Deep transcending emotion. Great read. Regards Rach

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Rach. I appreciate the kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
aLittlePain

9 Months Ago

Thank you, I'll certainly peruse for a while!
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OMG!!!! This one is mesmerizing.
Very well written.
I guess true feelings intended through this piece.
Beautiful!!!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, wander girl. I appreciate your kind words. Welcome to my poetic.. read more
Reminded of a love sick pirate ;-) last stanza is my favorite. Great write!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, A.Marie. A love sick pirate, huh!? Hmm. An interesting thought .. read more
A.marie.speaks

9 Months Ago

I've got a soft spot for pirates.. always wanted to be one.. haha
3,4,5 are my favorite stanzas here.
"To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam."--love this!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading this again, Josie. I appreciate your time and kind words.
Beautiful!
So very powerful. The lyrical flow of this poem is the perfect melody to the poignancy of your words. It wraps itself around the reader, and carries them to another place. Another time. Another life. It opens the longing in us all...beautifully written.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, ReedWrite. Very kind words for this piece. I appreciate your ti.. read more

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