Lachrymose Love

Lachrymose Love

A Poem by Doodley
"

Keats whispered in my ear.

"
For thee is there no more tender sight,
Than to stand upon the precipice of love at night,
With beating heart held in wistful hands,
And stare across seas to thy beloved's lands?

Oh! To be bathed in hope from the luminous light,
That reflects off the waves, so forever bright!
As ye affix thy gaze on a wandering star,
And follow its journey to thy love from afar!

As ye stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,
And its cries of its longing traverse infinite seas,
Guided by the caress of the night mistress breeze.

It is a Lachrymose Love that it sends off to thou,
Across oceans and glaciers and mountain tear snow,
To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam.

And upon the lonely precipice ye stand there and wait,
For a diastolic love tune that will seal thy fate,
Shall that heart grow its own wings and soar into sky?,
Or fade into silence, to shrivel and die?

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Written in a moment of personal Romanticism.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Doodley Doodley Doodley.. This one is so sick! I am feeling the vibe of this piece, especially at the moment. Well written. Well said. This longing and this realization of emotion is stated with a lot of depth and power. In case you haven't noticed, (Knives put away, I SWEAR~!) ...power poetry is my fave. If it's not powerful... it's not poetry!!
Good job Doodley.
..Misty

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

1 Month Ago

No.... o.o My photography has taken off and I have been studying for my Dutch exams. lol
Doodley

1 Month Ago

Well Done. Good luck with the exams. And his book is a real doorstopper!
M. L. F.

1 Month Ago

Aww thanks!! I will check it out after exams end Nov.. Great to talk again Doodley :)



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As thee stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,
And its cries of its longing traverse infinite seas,
Guided by the caress of the night mistress breeze.

It is a Lachrymose Love that it sends off to thou,
Across oceans and glaciers and mountain tear snow,
To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam.

These two stanzas took me to a different horizon , Doodley.

And those last two lines hits you at the right point.
This is so pious. Brilliantly crafted as always. 
let the heart grow its own wings and soar into sky.
And do not let it fade into silence, to shrivel and die.
I loved this write. Absolute perfection! Take a bow.




Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

*takes a bow* haha. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Very kind words. Best wishes to .. read more
Doodley - Jane and Mallika were so right! This poem is poetry at it's best, literature at it's zenith, and yes, love at it's own purest form.. Anyone who will read this poem is sure to be nostalgic about someone or something that may have touched their souls.. And I am a mere mortal and couldn't escape a drive down the memory lane... Thank you for keeping us stirred..

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sati. A very kind summation of this piece. Don't we all hold ou.. read more
Sati

11 Months Ago

Yup! we sure do...
Jane 18

11 Months Ago

Thanks. This is a very nice poem
"As thee stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,"
This was beautiful indeed! I loved the systolic/diastolic theory you used here... Romance at its best ☺

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Yumnakay. I appreciate your kind words. Best wishes for the fes.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

You are welcome, D! And you too ☺
This is one transcendental piece, surpassing limits of imagination, serenading beauty and surmounting adoration and devotion for the Loved. Your poesy excels in your latest. The way you use the scientific cardiac phenomenon systolis and dystolis is incredible. I am speechless with the way you have evoked a cocooning, warm, comforting feeling and the unpredictable, open ended question leaves one with an unmatched contemplation.

What praise can befit your writing, you were meant for gracing our lives with your inimitable gift.

Keep writing. You are a treasure.

Best,
M.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. Extremely kind words for this piece. I appreciate the .. read more
A amazing poem my friend.
"Shall that heart grow its own wings and soar into sky?,
Or fade into silence, to shrivel and die? "
I liked the questions above. Many way to die. Worst death is alone and forgotten. Thank you Dooley for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, as always, Coyote. I appreciate your support. Merry Christmas t.. read more
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

I hope you have a fun and safe holiday. You are welcome my friend.
very well written. you are a very developed writer i must say, i really had to wonder how could others who write such blah poetry be in the same forum as you are.

are you published?
tell me if you are, i would buy your book anyday.



Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sundara. I appreciate your very kind words. Hoping to be publis.. read more
are you a professional poet doodley?
this looks straight out of the book of verses my aunt forced me to read in school. keats, byron and shelley. your poem here is like theirs.
i am not that good in poetry and your poetry writing abilities makes me feel very small.
thanks for the rr, makes me want to reach for my dictionary and some brain tonic.

suffering from inferiority complex after reading you.

bye.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

11 Months Ago

Hahaha. Thank you for reading and a fantastic review, Jane. Like you i had to study those same poets.. read more
Jane 18

11 Months Ago

at least you mention your inspiration unlike some shameless plagiarists on this channel.

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Added on December 22, 2016
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Tags: Poem, love, longing, hope, rejection, sorrow

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Doodley

Sydney , Australia



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