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Lachrymose Love

Lachrymose Love

A Poem by Doodley
"

Keats whispered in my ear.

"
For thee is there no more tender sight,
Than to stand upon the precipice of love at night,
With beating heart held in wistful hands,
And stare across seas to thy beloved's lands?

Oh! To be bathed in hope from the luminous light,
That reflects off the waves, so forever bright!
As ye affix thy gaze on a wandering star,
And follow its journey to thy love from afar!

As ye stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,
And its cries of its longing traverse infinite seas,
Guided by the caress of the night mistress breeze.

It is a Lachrymose Love that it sends off to thou,
Across oceans and glaciers and mountain tear snow,
To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam.

And upon the lonely precipice ye stand there and wait,
For a diastolic love tune that will seal thy fate,
Shall that heart grow its own wings and soar into sky?,
Or fade into silence, to shrivel and die?

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Written in a moment of personal Romanticism.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Doodley Doodley Doodley.. This one is so sick! I am feeling the vibe of this piece, especially at the moment. Well written. Well said. This longing and this realization of emotion is stated with a lot of depth and power. In case you haven't noticed, (Knives put away, I SWEAR~!) ...power poetry is my fave. If it's not powerful... it's not poetry!!
Good job Doodley.
..Misty

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

10 Months Ago

No.... o.o My photography has taken off and I have been studying for my Dutch exams. lol
Doodley

10 Months Ago

Well Done. Good luck with the exams. And his book is a real doorstopper!
M. L. F.

10 Months Ago

Aww thanks!! I will check it out after exams end Nov.. Great to talk again Doodley :)



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yes, it does have that old time feel to it...a little Keats, but also a little Poe "helen thy beauty is to me..."

quite a well done piece....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. I appreciate your reviews and support of my writing all .. read more
Doodley
Searching the endless seas; is love found or lost. The world is lonely without one share this life. "To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home." The whole lovely complex poem hinges on this central theme. I totally identify with this writing of yours. So nice. Blessings to you. Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kathy. Very kind words. Best wishes to you for the festive seas.. read more
Love the personal romanticism, I really like the old way this sounds when read aloud. Some very nice lines, the last grouping was moving. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing. Best wishes for the festive season.
Valentine

1 Year Ago

Wishing you all of God's best in the coming year. Hope your Christmas was wonderful. Kathie
As thee stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,
And its cries of its longing traverse infinite seas,
Guided by the caress of the night mistress breeze.

It is a Lachrymose Love that it sends off to thou,
Across oceans and glaciers and mountain tear snow,
To settle in the chambers of the place it calls home,
To sleep there forever, and never to roam.

These two stanzas took me to a different horizon , Doodley.

And those last two lines hits you at the right point.
This is so pious. Brilliantly crafted as always. 
let the heart grow its own wings and soar into sky.
And do not let it fade into silence, to shrivel and die.
I loved this write. Absolute perfection! Take a bow.




Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

*takes a bow* haha. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Manasvini. Very kind words. Best wishes to .. read more
Doodley - Jane and Mallika were so right! This poem is poetry at it's best, literature at it's zenith, and yes, love at it's own purest form.. Anyone who will read this poem is sure to be nostalgic about someone or something that may have touched their souls.. And I am a mere mortal and couldn't escape a drive down the memory lane... Thank you for keeping us stirred..

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sati. A very kind summation of this piece. Don't we all hold ou.. read more
Sati

1 Year Ago

Yup! we sure do...
Jane 18

1 Year Ago

Thanks. This is a very nice poem
"As thee stand on the threshold of the place thee belong,
The heart in thy hands sings its systolic song,"
This was beautiful indeed! I loved the systolic/diastolic theory you used here... Romance at its best ☺

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Yumnakay. I appreciate your kind words. Best wishes for the fes.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You are welcome, D! And you too ☺
This is one transcendental piece, surpassing limits of imagination, serenading beauty and surmounting adoration and devotion for the Loved. Your poesy excels in your latest. The way you use the scientific cardiac phenomenon systolis and dystolis is incredible. I am speechless with the way you have evoked a cocooning, warm, comforting feeling and the unpredictable, open ended question leaves one with an unmatched contemplation.

What praise can befit your writing, you were meant for gracing our lives with your inimitable gift.

Keep writing. You are a treasure.

Best,
M.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. Extremely kind words for this piece. I appreciate the .. read more
A amazing poem my friend.
"Shall that heart grow its own wings and soar into sky?,
Or fade into silence, to shrivel and die? "
I liked the questions above. Many way to die. Worst death is alone and forgotten. Thank you Dooley for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, as always, Coyote. I appreciate your support. Merry Christmas t.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I hope you have a fun and safe holiday. You are welcome my friend.
very well written. you are a very developed writer i must say, i really had to wonder how could others who write such blah poetry be in the same forum as you are.

are you published?
tell me if you are, i would buy your book anyday.



Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sundara. I appreciate your very kind words. Hoping to be publis.. read more
are you a professional poet doodley?
this looks straight out of the book of verses my aunt forced me to read in school. keats, byron and shelley. your poem here is like theirs.
i am not that good in poetry and your poetry writing abilities makes me feel very small.
thanks for the rr, makes me want to reach for my dictionary and some brain tonic.

suffering from inferiority complex after reading you.

bye.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Hahaha. Thank you for reading and a fantastic review, Jane. Like you i had to study those same poets.. read more
Jane 18

1 Year Ago

at least you mention your inspiration unlike some shameless plagiarists on this channel.

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