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Newtonian Sorrow

Newtonian Sorrow

A Poem by Doodley
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Sonnet.

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At pearl light from womb till Life's twilight gloam,
The heralded pinnacle did I seek,
Universal answers contained in tome,
I found upon a lonely mountain peak.

Soundless secrets whispered into eager ears,
Infused the tendrils of my wondrous mind,
As swollen eyes seduced of falling tears,
Belied the joyous knowledge I did find.

But, wisdom's words cannot be cast to wind,
Dispersed as worthless without solemn care,
Else in Creator's wrath she might rescind,
This knowledge she cloaks in rarefied air.

As seekers of secrets quest's do begin,
My Newtonian Sorrow breeds within.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A first attempt at a Shakespearian sonnet.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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Wow... really love this one, with its depth of meaning...

Really nice. Thank you for sharing


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, JayDee. I appreciate the kind words. Welcome to my poetic domai.. read more
JayDee

1 Year Ago

Hahaha a great pleasure. And an honour it is. I look forward to much more
To bring out this kind of thought so beautifully it needs skill of someone like you only, Doodley. What really struck me is the message it has brought.
Soundlessly secrets whispered into eager years, this verse made recall what they say about our sacred knowledge the Vedas. The knowledge always exists in the form of fine sound and it descends upon the deserved.
A write from different plane brought out in the constrained form ! Excellent.
Your titles are always like the icing on the cake. You really the blessed one Doodley. Thank you for writing this sonnet.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bala. I appreciate your insightful and kind words. And yes, i a.. read more
"But, wisdom's words cannot be cast to wind,
Dispersed as worthless without solemn care,
Else in Creator's wrath she might rescind,
This knowledge she cloaks in rarefied air."

There's too much truth in these lines to ignore..

Although I'm a complete novice when it comes to technicalities of writing poetry, this sonnet certainly speaks volume.. And wonderfully so..

As it goes, "Seek and ye shall find", that we must...

I liked reading this one.. Definitely made me think :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You're welcome, Doodley! And I'm certainly giving this a thought to try.. ☺
Doodley

1 Year Ago

Many rules involved in sonnet writing, and it is somewhat restrictive. So persevere if you think you.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes, I observed it as well in your piece..
sounds like a romantic
that is grounded by gravity.
wishful yet it seems only to exist on top of that mountain...
you must come down-
and you do.

it seems that the tears
flow because the wisdom
that is uncovered
it's less romantic... or maybe not
sustainable

really like the back and forth of these
two feelings- not sure if it leaves me
wanting to seek or with the feeling of defeat

fascinating


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bacchus. Your interpretation is very close to what i had in min.. read more
As a person who likes to question the world around me, I'm often left with various questions. Some of those questions are given a voice while the others are left to fester away.

A great majority of sonnets are simply depictions of differing forms of love, but your sonnet is vastly different from the majority. You are able to make me relate to the feeling of watching knowledge get cast aside like the evil step-child.

Ignorance is detrimental to the spread of knowledge. Ignorance is what leads to loads of misinformation, and I can relate to your feeling of sorrow as you watch those around you disregard or ignore life's facts.

Keep writing the philosophical pieces. I think it's a pleasant surprise when I find healthy food for my mind to devour.

Feel free to send me more stimulating pieces to read anytime!

~~N. Brooks

(P.S. This was a great read!! It really made me think deeper thoughts about the concept of ignorance.

In addition to this, it really reminded me of the saying, "ignorance is bless," and I felt...almost sickened by that saying after I read your sonnet.)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Njeri Brooks

1 Year Ago

I think your the first person to ever say my review was graceful. Usually, I tell the writer, "proof.. read more
Doodley

1 Year Ago

Your interpretation was very interesting. Partly correct about the idea of wisdom and knowledge bein.. read more
Njeri Brooks

1 Year Ago

Ah, okay. That really ties things into a new perspective for me. Thank you!
I guess it's the bane of the truth seeker - those who thirst for knowledge - that they are rarely sated. If they do gain some satisfaction it is fleeting and then the next object of their desire appears on the horizon.
So much knowledge - so little time Doodley.
I love this form purely for it's connection to the Bard but I've never attempted it. Bravo my friend!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tony. I appreciate your insights and kind words on this piece. .. read more
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

Haha I bet it has.
The Bard would approve I'm sure.
:))
Wonderful flow! So elegant. I love the 2 last lines :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gullia. I appreciate your kind words.
very very well done...i am not a big fan of the form...usually sounds too contrived...not here...pretty natural ....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. I appreciate your "thumbs up" on this one! And i agree w.. read more

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