Iridescence Bloomed

Iridescence Bloomed

A Poem by Doodley
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For she who returns.

"
Oh, sweet night maiden whither art thou?
This wretched heart so longs for thee,
Thy tender caress upon mine brow,
To quench this flow of feverish sea.

This darkness sliced by pallid strain,
From whence hallucination cometh and goes,
To magnify this palsied pain,
And dull the light that long since glows.

From what viral intrusion doth I quake?
Who rapes mine eyes of crystal tear,
And burns in mine depths no liquid can slake,
And breeds this aluminium gust of fear?

Oh, Azrael! Is it thee I hear?
Dost thee reap ever gently against mine door?
Cometh to steal the last of breath I bear,
And snatch mine soul forevermore?

Hence! Begone! Thee cursed foul!
I shalt not transcend to eternal wight!
But to stayeth steadfast as the nocturnal owl,
And chooseth mine hour of passing flight!

As weakness envelopes mine waning rage,
And desire bows down at shadow's knees,
I reacheth mine penultimate lifetime page,
And enshroud myself in worthless pleas.

Is it sweet Death that this way comes?
Through blurring eyes I cannot see!
Till with sensual halcyon she sings and hums,
Sweet maiden, Love, hath returned to me!

She frowns upon mine withered frame,
And draweth me to her homely breast,
Cocooned I lay all still and tame,
In sense of waking, dying rest.

With burgundy lips like Summer's wine,
And eyes translucent drops of dew,
She pressed her mouth gently to mine,
And kissed mine soul with life anew!

Oh, Vitality! Whither hast though been?
Surge thyself all through mine veins!
To cast aside this jaundiced sheen,
And breaketh me free of sickly chains!

Sweet maiden, Love, gaveth final smile,
And vanished thus as Spring kissed snow,
Her fleeting stayeth for just this while,
Hadst restored the essence of mine flow.

Now, reborn to vigour by potent love,
Whither once hath lived shadow and all was't doomed,
I gaze upon the celestial canvas above,
As all around me iridescence bloomed.






© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
An Elizabethan archaic poem.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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By the gods and goddesses. My friend. I have no words. Would that you had written these words to this old crone and she should have pooled at your feet and melted happily into the nether, touched by the pen of true love! Damn, but you are talented!!!!!

To choose a stanza as a favorite makes for a bitter choice, but the eloquence and sheer strength of these words make the breath rush out of me every single time I read them:
"As weakness envelopes mine waning rage,
And desire bows down at shadow's knees,
I reacheth mine penultimate lifetime page,
And enshroud myself in worthless pleas."

And desire bows down at shadow's knees..... yes, this I love the best.

An amazing project and a true testament of your talent and beautiful mind.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Poetic License. I am humbled by your very generous appraisal an.. read more
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Archaic poems are hard to understand some of the time but this one is well made and interesting. Thanks for sharing another good poetry.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Nancy. I appreciate the time.
NANCY DON

2 Months Ago

Your welcome.
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Zoe
Oh my, Doodley, this is simply outstanding.
Having read a lot of your pieces, I'm discovering where most of your inspiration comes from. You know...if anything, just anything is taken away from someone, there is a little kindness remaining in this world that has the courtesy to compensate for the person's loss. You might not get what I'm saying but you cant blame me...im in such awe after reading the poem that im not able to form my sentences properly :)
So very well written.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. I am glad you enjoyed this piece. And yes, I understood wh.. read more
Zoe

3 Months Ago

Most welcome
It is incredible how you use the archaic words in context seamlessly and have the phrasing too, and it read naturally so that even if I didn't understand the specific word the meaning was still very clear, for example.
'Hence! Begone! Thee cursed foul!
I shalt not transcend to eternal wight!
But to stayeth steadfast as the nocturnal owl,
And chooseth mine hour of passing flight!'
I got that you are denying them control and you will remain where you chose until you want to move on, and the 'eternal wight', is the submissive person she wants you to be?
I particularly liked the begging tone at the start, very interesting and kind of reminds me of the all too common self-pitying friends.
Well done!!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Emma. I appreciate this lengthy analysis of the poem and for yo.. read more
Upon all the words you have heard in praise I give you my word as a gentle soul your writing grows like a river flows.

regards,
al

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Alfred. I always welcome your kind comments on my writes. I hop.. read more
Alfred Kukitz

8 Months Ago

Veteran, Memorial & other days I feel the loss of my waring year.
You do an amazing job of portraying an anguished soul seeking rejuvenation in the lapels of the sweet night maiden. The language is classic and reminscent of a beautiful, bygone era and the imagery is breathtaking!

With burgundy lips like Summer's wine,
And eyes translucent drops of dew,
She pressed her mouth gently to mine,
And kissed mine soul with life anew!

A soul brought back to life by the magic of potent love!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

8 Months Ago

With such inspiring poetry, Its a pleasure all mine, dear Doodley.
Doodley

8 Months Ago

No! No! No! The pleasure is all mine!
DIVYA

8 Months Ago

:))))))))))))))
*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

"From whence hallucination cometh and goes,
To magnify this palsied pain"

"I shalt not transcend to eternal wight!
But to stayeth steadfast as the nocturnal owl, "

*Till with sensual halcyon she sings and hums, *

*Surge thyself all through mine veins!
To cast aside this jaundiced sheen,
And breaketh me free of sickly chains! *

All of it... A tale told in woeful old ballad fashion... or w/e fashion it is... Oh... An Elizabethan archaic poem... I see.. This is just badass... It feels old school Gothic... I am clueless to actual terms and such... But I just... Dug this poem... Always wanted to write this way growing up...







Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

8 Months Ago

Those need to be modded all the time, tho... Will take some thinking...
Doodley

8 Months Ago

Certainly it would become a target for the trolls!
Silente

8 Months Ago

^^^^^^^^^^
This is the best piece of writing I've read in a long while. Just mind blowing. The imagery was superb, vividly detailed and the rhyme...wow. The fact that it's put in archaic made it all the much better. A good one, made my eyes tear up a teeny tiny but haha.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. Humbled by your kind praise for this piece. Sorry about .. read more
That was indeed very rich and smooth
Like it eventually flows
Your words are like honey - Glowing and Sweet!
May god bless you and Thankyou for this Piece!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pragati. I appreciate the very kind words. Welcome to my poetic.. read more
Well. I thought this was wonderful. It flowed along so well, creative imagery and , actually, very romantic! Love lost, love returned so now one can 'gaze upon the celestial canvass above', with hope and strength!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Great Aunt Astri. I appreciate the kind words.
beautifully written poem. the rhyming gave me a real soothing joy to read. your poetic essence really gives life to your works
a real joy to read
reminds me of the days i read Shakespeare in college.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pia. I am quite fond of this style of writing, with Keats being.. read more

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