Forsaken's End

Forsaken's End

A Poem by Doodley
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For Love's abandoned.

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Greetings thee, Darkness, mine friend!
Didst absence leaveth thee bereft and frail?
Returneth has't thee to caress and mend,
Mine anemic heart that love hath fail?

For Siren song hath pierced mine sail,
To smash me against her seductive rocks,
As Ahab fool in pursuit of whale,
I hath fallen as prey to her callous mocks.

Whither once Life shone as bright as beams,
That lit the path of Love mine way,
Hath now been dulled to fog of dreams,
Whither cast adrift and lost I stay.

No more Love's sparrows calleth mine name,
Nor crimson rose bow at mine feet,
For vultures feast this wasted frame,
In exuberant delight at mine defeat.

So comfort me, Darkness, mine friend!
Cloak me tight in thy sable embrace,
And restore the essence of mine blend,
To potent peaks of strength and grace.

Fastened unto thy succored teat,
Away! Away! I shalt dissolve with thee!
To flee these manacles of raging heat,
Unto the lodging that summons me.

Beyond the leap of torture's bound,
Across the desolated glen,
To lay upon the fertile ground,
Betwixt the bowels of shattered men.

Then Darkness, friend, shalt taketh thy leave,
Amidst mine screams of Lycan bay,
Mine suffering soul shalt wail and grieve,
Unless the healing salve holds sway.

And thither beneath forsaken sky,
Amongst mine scores of brethren kin,
I'll lay me down to rest and die,
Beneath the tears of River Fin.

And with mine last of shallow breath,
This fool shalt keepeth mine ears attune,
For Siren song to stall mine death,
Should it returneth to me so soon.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A hybrid confessional archaic poem.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Often we may fall victim to a world ever so fast
For those whom hold any form of sentiment
The thought of seperating from a lover
is truly intolerable
Overnight it would feel like a world of people have abandoned this soul
Yet maybe the truth of an emotion
is distance
Once again Doodley you have not failed at delivering an abundance of emotion
You are a very talented writer with a very big heart



Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lingering Soul. I appreciate your kind words and support of my .. read more



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'Beyond the leap of torture's bound,
Across the desolated glen,
To lay upon the fertile ground,
Betwixt the bowels of shattered men..

Old world writing style born of the eternal pain of lost love and its wretched aftermath. Emotionally unconstrained but, language contained,

Posted 2 Months Ago


Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Emmajoy. I appreciate the time. Welcome to my poetic domain.
The lyrical notes here are almost jarring in how archaic they feel, but then they draw you in and it becomes, much like a music. The repetition of darkness as a friend feels like a chorus and I must say very well done. If it is a confession though, you hide it well behind this, because I only barely glimpse it. Thank you.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, William. I appreciate the time.
Wow.. this is a very deep & powerful piece !! Brava my friend BRAVA !!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Farmgirl. I appreciate the kind words. Glad you liked this one.
Farmgirl

3 Months Ago

Oh i do! And thanks for sharing..
Really great poem! The word choice is super impressive and this poem is extremely emotional.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sad Poet. This is an apt poem for your writing pseudonym! I app.. read more
(applauds) This is brilliant!!! :D This poem speaks to my heartbroken soul on so many levels. The hurt, the misery, the loneliness........it brings one to tears. Very Shakespeare, mate. :D

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

Thank you for sharing your amazing work with a mere peasant. lol
Doodley

3 Months Ago

We all have our talents.
Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

Aye, that we do. :) Your's seems to be capturing darkness and transforming it into the blue rose. It.. read more
A sad tale of beauty no doubt but as the ink lays on the script the soul's light finds a friend in penmanship.

Your writing worth praise & honor!

Regards,
Al

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Alfred. A very poetic review as always! I appreciate your time .. read more
This is dark and beautiful, and painful. The archaic words strengthen the impact on feelings and imagination of the reader, I wish I can do that. Somehow, darkness has a comforting presence, and the forsaken end to me is a sight of pain and comfort, two feelings in one song. Thanks for sharing Doodley. Take care.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Olive/Aprille. Glad you enjoyed this piece. I appreciate your s.. read more
Aprille

3 Months Ago

You're welcome. :)
Excellent write... the agony and pain seeps through.... your an amazing writer Doodley every word well placed brings together epic emotion in a classic and elegant way!


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hebe. Humbled by your praise. I appreciate your time and kind w.. read more
Wow nice writing doodley. Very mature. Dark also. Sirens r vicious n they end up getting what they want. They suck tge life of a person n shdnt get a moments peace in my opinion. Ur poem seems very personal and it seems very full of hurt.keep writing. I will read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sundara. I appreciate the insights and kind words.
Sundara Mani

3 Months Ago

Ur welcm!!!!!!
An olde form of writing to go with this age-old theme......love abandoned. It works well. It does read a little 'tongue-in-cheek', or so I thought on first read. Then I read it again in a more serious vein, and that works well too. I can just imagine the broken hearted lover on a stage willing the welcoming friend of night to come with its healing salve, and then as he lays down to die(sleep) the stage lights darken. When all is in blackness, the Siren song can be heard! Your moving poem got my imagination going!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Great Aunt Astri. Certainly not written tongue in cheek this on.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

4 Months Ago

Yes, I did see that it was serious. But I think the archaic wording, not often used these days, coul.. read more

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