Forsaken's End

Forsaken's End

A Poem by Doodley
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For Love's abandoned.

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Greetings thee, Darkness, mine friend!
Didst absence leaveth thee bereft and frail?
Returneth has't thee to caress and mend,
Mine anemic heart that love hath fail?

For Siren song hath pierced mine sail,
To smash me against her seductive rocks,
As Ahab fool in pursuit of whale,
I hath fallen as prey to her callous mocks.

Whither once Life shone as bright as beams,
That lit the path of Love mine way,
Hath now been dulled to fog of dreams,
Whither cast adrift and lost I stay.

No more Love's sparrows calleth mine name,
Nor crimson rose bow at mine feet,
For vultures feast this wasted frame,
In exuberant delight at mine defeat.

So comfort me, Darkness, mine friend!
Cloak me tight in thy sable embrace,
And restore the essence of mine blend,
To potent peaks of strength and grace.

Fastened unto thy succored teat,
Away! Away! I shalt dissolve with thee!
To flee these manacles of raging heat,
Unto the lodging that summons me.

Beyond the leap of torture's bound,
Across the desolated glen,
To lay upon the fertile ground,
Betwixt the bowels of shattered men.

Then Darkness, friend, shalt taketh thy leave,
Amidst mine screams of Lycan bay,
Mine suffering soul shalt wail and grieve,
Unless the healing salve holds sway.

And thither beneath forsaken sky,
Amongst mine scores of brethren kin,
I'll lay me down to rest and die,
Beneath the tears of River Fin.

And with mine last of shallow breath,
This fool shalt keepeth mine ears attune,
For Siren song to stall mine death,
Should it returneth to me so soon.


© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A hybrid confessional archaic poem.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Often we may fall victim to a world ever so fast
For those whom hold any form of sentiment
The thought of seperating from a lover
is truly intolerable
Overnight it would feel like a world of people have abandoned this soul
Yet maybe the truth of an emotion
is distance
Once again Doodley you have not failed at delivering an abundance of emotion
You are a very talented writer with a very big heart



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lingering Soul. I appreciate your kind words and support of my .. read more



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It has been long and I was waiting what it would be from your pen this time, Doodley. This dark write in that elegant style yet showing that emotion and call from touched my heart. You never fail your standards whether it is style or content. I wonder how is this consistency possible. I must say you are rare and gifted.
A very strong emotion that is relatable to all in a delicate and emotional state is seen here. The detachment with the world one feels after some shocks is very truly brought out in this address of yours to that Forsaken's end .
It is Quite a heavy one but it truly presented the agony. I am awed at the emotion that is brought out in this poem throughout.
The hearts that have already gone through such phase are sure to echo with this poem. Thank you for sharing.
I myself have been very dormant on the site these days but am glad to have come in today to have read this classic piece. God bless you, Doodley!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bala. Yes, like you i have been inactive lately. Sometimes one .. read more
Eerie and dark with Poe-like wisdom among a story line of weaved thoughts in a poem speaking like a narrative of reflections bringing a sense of this place.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. A dark one, indeed. I appreciate your time and insights.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

3 Months Ago

You are welcome, Doodley.
:)
Another top of the class write Doodley and enjoyed the old worldly charm of old words you weave.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. Top of the class? Well, I eagerly await my gold star! E.. read more
andrew mitchell

3 Months Ago

you write so well doodley, so well indeed.
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Well, that makes two of us! Hahaha
wow, so well done....has shades of Poe....and makes me think he would have sounded like this in his dark poetry had he lived a few centuries before he actually did....
really good job with the archaic language....i took an Old English class....really hard to capture it well, and you did.

j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. Flattered by the Poe comparison! Not in his class though.. read more
Often we may fall victim to a world ever so fast
For those whom hold any form of sentiment
The thought of seperating from a lover
is truly intolerable
Overnight it would feel like a world of people have abandoned this soul
Yet maybe the truth of an emotion
is distance
Once again Doodley you have not failed at delivering an abundance of emotion
You are a very talented writer with a very big heart



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lingering Soul. I appreciate your kind words and support of my .. read more
dear Doodley ... "no more love's sparrows calleth mine name". . is a sweetheart of a line... The phases of life are always marching forward... leaving us with stubbed toes and heavy hearts. The light still shines and we carry on. Love songs like "Morning has broken"
by Cat Stevens. We are spirits and spirits survive through the ages. Our youth is spent, but the wealth of the golden years is not yet spent. Love your poetry as it is reality... but the light still shines even after death. truly, Pat

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1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pat. I appreciate your time and words of wisdom about this piec.. read more
Patricia Wedel

3 Months Ago

Yes... life is like holding a candle that can be a "torch" to pass on... truly, Pat
I am not so good with this style of writing! It gets difficult to follow at times. But I must say the thought behind these lines is so vivid and felt that it speaks through very well for me. Amazing work! Thanks for sharing it😊

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Krutika. Archaic language is not as difficult to decipher as it.. read more
You published yet?
Had me at Ahab...
'nother great write.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bacchus. Not published as yet. Like all of us, i hope to be soo.. read more
Amazing poem in classic wordage, style, form and rhyme! Masterful Ode to death's inevitable approach- with dark, haunting, dramatic imagery-"betwixt the bowels of shattered men"..Melville reference so perfect. The Greats would be proud of this! Kudos

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. Very humbled by your kind words on this piece. Welcome.. read more
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Zoe
Oh wow, you really are well versed with archaic writing style. This work seems so unique. Darkness is a real wicked theme to write on, probably perceived differently by each. You've put forward your thoughts in a real beautiful way. Lovely rhymes. Loved it!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Yes, i do enjoy using the archaic style. Many of my influe.. read more
Zoe

4 Months Ago

Most welcome!

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