Gethsemane

Gethsemane

A Poem by Doodley
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Under the olives.

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He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.

© 2017 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.

Any comments are appreciated.

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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

2 Days Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!



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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

2 Days Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!
They could not watch with Him for even one hour.
Sweating actual blood, Jesus dreaded the quickly approaching sarifice.
A senryu dealing with matters of staggering significance!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jimmy. I appreciate the comment. Welcome to my poetic domain.
The anguish, loneliness and betrayal of that heavy, depressing night, all captured in totality, in this senryu!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. Indeed it must have been a very depressing night. I appr.. read more
this is so Roman times to me with many a leader betrayed.
Lovely brevity all the same open to interpretations.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. This was just something that came to mind. Writing some.. read more
Even though this poem is very short, it has a lot of meaning behind it. It is much bigger than its size would make it seem. I can imagine his distress as he kneels there, feeling betrayed and alone.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hannah. It's been awhile! I appreciate the thoughts on this pie.. read more
In respect to the true God do we kneel. thanks for sharing this poem. I think it is wonderful.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Roxane. Very true words. I appreciate the praise for this simpl.. read more
Bigger than imagined. The juices flow!

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Alfred. I appreciate the encouragement.
This strikes me as an emotional description of a thought. It says to me, "I may be kneeling, alone, and broken, but I won't bow as you betray me."
I think your little blurb captured Jesus's agony in the garden quite well.


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Chaos. A very precise interpretation. I appreciate the kind wor.. read more
Wow. That was so good in many ways. It hit me right through the heart. Well done.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Capolavoro. I appreciate the kind words.

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Tags: Betrayal., Agony, Poem

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Sydney , Australia



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