Gethsemane

Under the olives.

He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.

Author's Note

Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.

Any comments are appreciated.

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I appreciate your time and words.

[Doodley]

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This image and Senryu are perfectly unforgettable. Beautiful words, form, profundity, meaning. We would have been bowed. He was not. Hallelujah. Amen. Great write!

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. I appreciate you stopping by and taking a look at my take on the events of that fateful night.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are most welcome my friend!:)

[Thoughts In Time]

Powerful- but pushing through the whispers is what brings victory and ability to endure and defeat - great poem 🌹

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. I appreciate these wise words. Very true. Welcome to my poetic domain.

[Thoughts In Time]

I just love this poem it expresses so much - those in contact with spirit will understand🌹

[Thoughts In Time]

My pleasure🌹

[Ewan Leibowitz]

This made me think of Jesus, that's the garden he was in the night before he was betrayed right? Does this have a religious context?

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Ewan. Yes, the religious context is plainly obvious. However not all poetry is as straightforward as it may read. I appreciate the time. Welcome to my poetic domain.

[mou]

I like 'unbowed' posture while living in 'anguish'..many times some chapters are unforgettable in life in a true sense while the ink of loyalty in those are completely faded away..beautiful

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate the kind words.

[mou]

my pleasure :)

[Sami Khalil]

"He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray."

[Jimmy Yetts]

They could not watch with Him for even one hour.
Sweating actual blood, Jesus dreaded the quickly approaching sacrifice.
A senryu dealing with matters of staggering significance!

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jimmy. I appreciate the comment. Welcome to my poetic domain.

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The anguish, loneliness and betrayal of that heavy, depressing night, all captured in totality, in this senryu!

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. Indeed it must have been a very depressing night. I appreciate your visit and comments.

[andrew mitchell]

this is so Roman times to me with many a leader betrayed.
Lovely brevity all the same open to interpretations.

[Doodley]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. This was just something that came to mind. Writing some senryu's in the time between longer pieces. I appreciate the comment.