Gethsemane

Gethsemane

A Poem by Doodley
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Under the olives.

"
He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.

© 2018 Doodley



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Doodley
Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.

Any comments are appreciated.

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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

1 Year Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!



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One is able to feel His abandonment with the few words you have so carefully chosen: "He kneels there solus." Your senryu is powerfully dramatic. What an accomplished writer you are, Doodley. You must be an Aussie. :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tamara. Indeed, I am Australian, yet poetry crosses all borders.. read more
Tamara Beryl Latham

1 Month Ago

Hi, dodley. I'm from Brisbane. Live in the US now. :)
very nice poem..........really heart touching in a few words.


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christina. I appreciate the time and kind words.
christina sherin

6 Months Ago

my pleasure
Unbowed in anguish, Jesus on that last night. Superbly done and memorable.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christine. I appreciate the time.
Excellent, a wonderful blending of those events

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Cherrie. I appreciate the time and kind words.
This image and Senryu are perfectly unforgettable. Beautiful words, form, profundity, meaning. We would have been bowed. He was not. Hallelujah. Amen. Great write!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. I appreciate you stopping by and taking a look at my t.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

9 Months Ago

You are most welcome my friend!:)
Powerful- but pushing through the whispers is what brings victory and ability to endure and defeat - great poem 🌹

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. I appreciate these wise words. Very true. Wel.. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

9 Months Ago

I just love this poem it expresses so much - those in contact with spirit will understand🌹
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

9 Months Ago

My pleasure🌹
This made me think of Jesus, that's the garden he was in the night before he was betrayed right? Does this have a religious context?

Posted 9 Months Ago


Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Ewan. Yes, the religious context is plainly obvious. However no.. read more
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mou
I like 'unbowed' posture while living in 'anguish'..many times some chapters are unforgettable in life in a true sense while the ink of loyalty in those are completely faded away..beautiful

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate the kind words.
mou

9 Months Ago

my pleasure :)
"He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray."

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"

Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read more
Doodley

1 Year Ago

And also....welcome to my poetic domain!

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Added on September 5, 2017
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Tags: Betrayal., Agony, Poem

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