Gethsemane
A Poem by Doodley
 Under the olives. 
He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray.
© 2018 Doodley
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Experimenting with something different to get the creative juices flowing.
Any comments are appreciated.
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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"
Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.
Posted 9 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read moreThank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I appreciate your time and words.
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9 Months Ago
And also....welcome to my poetic domain!
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very nice poem..........really heart touching in a few words.
Posted 2 Months Ago
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2 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christina. I appreciate the time and kind words.
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Unbowed in anguish, Jesus on that last night. Superbly done and memorable.
Posted 3 Months Ago
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3 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christine. I appreciate the time.
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Excellent, a wonderful blending of those events
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3 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Cherrie. I appreciate the time and kind words.
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This image and Senryu are perfectly unforgettable. Beautiful words, form, profundity, meaning. We would have been bowed. He was not. Hallelujah. Amen. Great write!
Posted 5 Months Ago
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5 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. I appreciate you stopping by and taking a look at my t.. read moreThank you for reading and reviewing, Annette. I appreciate you stopping by and taking a look at my take on the events of that fateful night.
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5 Months Ago
You are most welcome my friend!:)
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Powerful- but pushing through the whispers is what brings victory and ability to endure and defeat - great poem 🌹
Posted 5 Months Ago
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5 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. I appreciate these wise words. Very true. Wel.. read moreThank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. I appreciate these wise words. Very true. Welcome to my poetic domain.
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5 Months Ago
I just love this poem it expresses so much - those in contact with spirit will understand🌹
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5 Months Ago
My pleasure🌹
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This made me think of Jesus, that's the garden he was in the night before he was betrayed right? Does this have a religious context?
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5 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Ewan. Yes, the religious context is plainly obvious. However no.. read moreThank you for reading and reviewing, Ewan. Yes, the religious context is plainly obvious. However not all poetry is as straightforward as it may read. I appreciate the time. Welcome to my poetic domain.
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I like 'unbowed' posture while living in 'anguish'..many times some chapters are unforgettable in life in a true sense while the ink of loyalty in those are completely faded away..beautiful
Posted 5 Months Ago
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5 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate the kind words.
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5 Months Ago
my pleasure :)
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"He kneels there solus,
Unbowed in anguish as the
Night whispers Betray."
Posted 6 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Wow, "He kneels their souls unbowed in anguish as the night whispers betray"
Signifies that a demon impersonates an Angel with a sword and when the victims lower their guard, it cuts their heads, then they become whisperers for infinity because before reaching Heaven, they gave up as they kneeled, they looked down and they gave their heads to the demon disguised as an Angel.
Posted 9 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I a.. read moreThank you for reading and reviewing, Squinkla. A very interesting interpretation of this senryu. I appreciate your time and words.
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9 Months Ago
And also....welcome to my poetic domain!
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They could not watch with Him for even one hour.
Sweating actual blood, Jesus dreaded the quickly approaching sacrifice.
A senryu dealing with matters of staggering significance!
Posted 9 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Months Ago
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jimmy. I appreciate the comment. Welcome to my poetic domain.
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Added on September 5, 2017
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Tags: Betrayal., Agony, Poem
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DoodleySydney , Australia
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