The Broken Shore

The Broken Shore

A Poem by Doodley
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Dodoitsu.

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Blessed be those Crusoe souls

Ravaged beneath blood red squall

Wrecked and violently scattered

'Pon love's broken shore.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A first attempt at a Japanese Dodoitsu.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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Beautiful and powerful- yes the shore where those broken souls do lie deserted alone with no hope or belief- hanging on... not even sure if the want to be saved- oh so far far away- hoping to be found- I see upon a deserted island... once finding themselves maybe ...just wonderful🌹

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thoughts In Time. An accurate interpretation. I appreciate the .. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

7 Months Ago

Always my pleasure🌹



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You've captured a dramatic interpretation of Crusoe Island in this wonderful Japanese Dodoitsu, and it is a great first attempt on your part. I enjoy learning new poetic forms.

Excellent writing! Thanks for sharing this one! :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Tamara. I appreciate the time and very kind words.
Tamara Beryl Latham

1 Month Ago

You're quite welcome.
Had that come up in a quiz. I would have said, dog.
Four lines of powerful verse.
Brings the story back to mind.


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Paul. I appreciate the time and comment.
I dont know what Japanese Dodoitsu is but i think you nailed it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Indeed i have. Shot them with a Troll Gun. Aka...Blocked. Should do the same. They are welcome to kn.. read more
Wyrn Tiger

1 Month Ago

After they wrote a parody on my work i shot the same gun.
Doodley

1 Month Ago

As are everyone it seems. They will disappear into the crack from whence they came soon enough. Just.. read more
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Gee
Jesus, thought that was a certain style of martial art.
Been many washed up and many more will follow, luckily never been there myself.
Good morning Doodley, hope all is well in the land of green and gold :))

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gee. I appreciate the time taken. Good afternoon to you. All is.. read more
Gee

2 Months Ago

All is great thanks. Top of the pile, defence playing well and Salah yet to kick into top gear. Ho.. read more
I don't know what a dodoitsu quite is but this poem does have an effect. Even though it says souls and that they might be scattered after a ship wreck, souls that once belonged to each other will find a way back to each other even if they are marooned for a while. At least that is my interpretation.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Vivian. The Dodoitsu is an ancient Japanese form of poetry. An .. read more
Vivian Gospel

2 Months Ago

Gotta learn something knew everyday. Thanks Sensei.
There's so much intensity between the economy of words. I am deeply inspired. Sorry for reviewing it so late. I haven't been around...so...

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Suhd. I appreciate the insights. No apology needed. Been absent.. read more
Well done, Doodly, the comparison is so appropriate. I've never heard of this style before. Quite interesting.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Relic. I wrote this while doing research into some ancient styl.. read more

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Added on March 23, 2018
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