La Douleur Exquise

La Douleur Exquise

A Poem by Doodley
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The Exquisite Pain.

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Upon this crest of fragile plain,
Do I ensconce and contemplate,
'Neath drizzling tears of scarlet rain,
How cruel to me are hands of Fate.

Sweet Venus stroked so ever slight,
And stoked desires in my hearth,
Sun-kissed the cold froze embers bright,
And swept me far from outcast Earth.

Whereupon the wings of starlit steeds,
I soared against the Huntress night,
To engorge myself of all my needs,
And deeply drank of her bosom's light.

Gently quenched into slumberous drowse,
I surrendered unto Queen Luna's lure,
Whispered my sweet intentioned vows,
And seduced the moonlight deep from her.

And there below in shadows gloom,
Where true heart's desire lithely stepped,
With her crystalline glow did I illume,
Such a wondrous beauty, that I wept.

Cocooned within her mountainous breast,
I gazed down in awe, so far, yet near,
Like Serene herself with eyes undressed,
Upon her Endymion as Love's voyeur.

How lustrous is her obsidian mane!,
How silken are her delicate lips!,
That dwell in eloquence without disdain,
And stir my heart with fluttering skips!

Ah! Fay beauty of this Earthen dale,
Sublimity and your name entwine!,
Enraptured by your ravishing veil,
How deeply I long to make you mine!

So, upon the winds of timeless space,
I dispatched my song of love enthralled,
Floating tenderly to her warm embrace,
To patiently wait for my love recalled.

Alas! This melody of love-struck swoon,
Breached not her heart of iron facade,
Bypassed the slivers of light of moon,
To fall unheard in the pitiless shade.

Then as Fate would have, I watched unseen,
Bespectacled with luminent starry eye,
Her face did gleam with radiant sheen,
As she gazed upon her Adonis nearby.

Urged together by ruthless Moirai's hand,
They interweaved as if magnetised,
Lip-locked in place where they stand,
Enshrouded deep in their lustful sighs.

Thwarted by Tyche into breathless gasp,
In hysteria's grip of hope destroyed,
I released my hold from Luna's grasp,
To fall unwinged into miseries void.

And downward spiraled on Zephyr's breath,
Through darkness bereft of sight and sound,
Past the sneering face of cackling Death,
To crash upon Earth's verdant ground.

So, here I bide on this fractured veld,
Soaked deep to soul 'neath miseries mizzle,
And contemplate what Fate beheld;
An unrequited love that now shall fizzle.

In the throes of La Douleur Exquise,
This unrelenting chasm of heartache pain,
As love's desirous lingers, so near, yet far,
I lie unmourned, and forever to remain.







© 2018 Doodley



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Author's Note

Doodley
Truth and fiction entwined as one.
La Douleur Exquise = La-doo-lore eks-keez-uh.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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A remarkable poem my friend. One that I had to read several times to imbibe the full beauty and meaning of. The special thing to me about this poem is that it has a sublime yet realistic feel to it. I can liken it to a dreamy, trance like state yet with events playing out that feel very real.

That your word choice is superb (the ethereal beauty of the night and Luna is to die for) and you always rhyme exquisitly, goes without me saying it but you outdid even yourself with this poem, my dear Doodley.

The reference to the Greek mythological characters is very thoughtfully done and made for interesting reading. I believe Serene, the daughter of Titan, had several lovers attributed to her :) Endymion had issues with that, I see. Yet not all may have been as his mortal eyes perceived.

The title is fetching too. I read somewhere that there can be more than one soul mate to a soul. Interesting again. This poem is deeper than deep on so many levels.

This poem deserves 1000/100. It’s too special for WC. Standing applause from the lioness and the bee. 💐💫💥⚡️✨



***The consolation about crashing on verdant earth is that we have beaches here, my friend. Roll up your socks. We have to run 🏃🏽‍♂️

Posted 6 Days Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

6 Days Ago

That ‘read more’ ate half my comments. What I said was that it will be ensured you have a parac.. read more
Doodley

6 Days Ago

Ha! If you say so!
DIVYA

6 Days Ago

:))))))))))))))) so nice of you to agree!



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Then as Fate would have, I watched unseen,
Bespectacled with luminent starry eye,
Her face did gleam with radiant sheen,
As she gazed upon her Adonis nearby. ...

I enjoyed this parah a lot..

I could only dream of writing like this... :)
It's very well crafted..I am just left spellbound...:))

Posted 12 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ardra

11 Hours Ago

What do u call the ones from Venus.. ah and Saturn perhaps.. :))
Doodley

11 Hours Ago

Venusians and Saturnians, i think.
Ardra

11 Hours Ago

... :p
Guess we will have to ask them...
As an ardent lunar lover I admired what u wrote about the moon so poetically. Infact I have many unposted poems in which I too address the moon as a royal, a king to be exact and I like to call it my fav sliver.
Your poem is obviously high calibre classic eloquence which could eclipse many of our writings but I write more for my message than poetry for I dare not seek perfection in a language while there are those whose mother tongue is it. You poem is way awesome than I could ever write so kudos to your skill. I liked the Greek mythology characters you employed to effect as I've read of many of them, . Great romantic epic.

So nice to read from u again, u may read my newest poem too, and it's ok if u don't comment and it's ok if give me constructive criticism.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, S.zaynab. I appreciate this extensive review. I will read your .. read more
I must say, you never disappoint, Sir Doodles. The grandiose wording and themes greatly amplify the truth mentioned in the author's note. What greater muse is there than our own lives? I'm always a sucker for Greek allusions, and you sprinkle them in without overdoing it - not overdoing things is a talent many poets lack. Good pacing and wording throughout, and that ending hits painfully hard.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. I appreciate these kind words. And i agree with your .. read more
I am standing with DIVYA...Ovation deserved. Beautiful piece for its rhythm and rhyme (ordinarily i am not a big fan of rhyme) But you won me over with your work...
j.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. I appreciate your kind words. I understand rhyme is not .. read more
exquisite writing my friend i just read in awe at the excellence here fit for a king with its old worldly charm. breath takingly so!

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. I appreciate the time and kind words. Any appreciation .. read more
andrew mitchell

4 Days Ago

Haha lol"...........
Truth dressed in imagination the perfect blend.
And downward spiraled on Zephyr's breath ...
Through darkness bereft of sight and sound, ...what a delightful image.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Cherrie. I appreciate the time and kind words.
The French title grabbed my attention! I love French, even though I'm not great at speaking it. I had to read this poem a few times to absorb the whole thing. I love all the Greek references all throughout, and the imagery, sensory words, and great word usage make this a wonderful read. I think the ABAB was the right choice. With all the heavy lines, having the stresses so close would have made reading difficult, but it was much easier with what you did. I'm as jealous as ever, Doodley! Good work. I would rate this 120/100 if I could.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Hannah. You are right about the rhyme scheme. More difficult wr.. read more
Beautifully penned in words And structure!
I appreciate the time you take to perfect your poetry.
I love your reference points and clarity with nature involved.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

5 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. I appreciate your time and kind words. There is always s.. read more
This is a poem deserving of many reviews Doodley. Rhyming and metered, it is just up my street, and I enjoyed the references to Greek mythology. I found it rather Keat's like and I am a great admirer of his work. Some delicious words used. Swoon, mizzle and verdant are not your everyday words, so it was lovely to see their inclusion. The fourth stanza is my favourite and you conjured up some wonderful imagery in your lines. A lovely read.

Chris

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christine. As you quite rightly noticed, Keats is one of my gre.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

6 Days Ago

I have visited Keats House twice with poetry friends. It was wonderful to go there and to see where .. read more
Doodley

5 Days Ago

Now that is impressive. Certainly something to add to my bucket list!
Gripping and exquisite. Pain can be joyful or not depending on the intent and consequence at hand. The birth of childhood for a woman is temporarily stressful but one that brings immense joy. Pain of love or forgiveness are other examples. Pain should be rooted in understanding its benefits. No pain , no gain as it has been said.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami. I agree with your words here. Pain is a necessity of life.. read more
Sami Khalil

6 Days Ago

So true. You are most welcome.

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