Bloodlust Springs

Bloodlust Springs

A Poem by Doodley
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Dodoitsu.

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In Bloodlust Springs does she bathe

Impure waters soaked in rage

Curdling scarlet frothing foam

'Pon an Eros corpse.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A Japanese Dodoitsu.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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Hi Doodley!
Rage and sin are old bedmates!

The 7-7-7-5 structure is used to perfection to tell the story of a woman who in bloodlust has killed her own purpose of existence. It is a common trait of angry people to forget their own follies, their own impurities when they spew curdled frothing foam from their scarlet mouths on others, but they forget that they are watched and nothing under the sun goes unnoticed. Retribution or karma is then swift, the immediate fallout being the utter annihilation and death of Eros or love in their lives. Symbolically then, she’ll live on as a corpse! Barren, bitter and unloved. For that is her very nature, what comes innately to her.

I shudder to think who you were thinking of when you wrote this darkly disturbing and powerful piece! Not me I hope...I’m a good girl :(

I am elated and delighted you posted a new write after such a long time. Can you please write another, happier one for me?

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. A very accurate interpretation of the poem. I couldn't h.. read more
DIVYA

1 Week Ago

It’s my pleasure to read you, it gives me a peak into that uniquely beautiful mind. Anything new i.. read more



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Powerful piece, D!
Pretty much how I see most women.


Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jimmy. Not all women in my experience, but certain ones! I appr.. read more
Jimmy Yetts

2 Days Ago

Just kidding, Doodley!
The allure of blood leads many astray. There's quite a powerful message in this small container. On a jollier note, I like your new look.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. Just a wee write this one. And yes, it was time for a.. read more
I like this style. Short but packs a serious punch. Thumbs up from me!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, LK. I appreciate the time and thumbs up!
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Many have lost at love and came out bitter in the end. This great.

I looked up Dodoitsu but couldn't find it in the dictionary. I assume there's a pattern to this type of poetry?

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Relic. The Dodoitsu is a Japanese form of ancient poetry. Just .. read more
 Relic

4 Days Ago

Thanks for the info.
Doodley

4 Days Ago

No worries.
There are interludes in life when
the sinister side of life is pulling one under.
Best to be aware even in poetry that
One must avoid the snare and take care.
Amen... Pat

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

4 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pat. Very wise words you presented here. I couldn't agree more... read more
Good stuff doodley. Very raw and angsty. You must really hate her to write such lines.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Vivian. I appreciate the time and comment.
nice style Doodley, well structured to deliver fine brevity.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andrew. Just a simple write in an effort to brush away the poet.. read more
i agree with Chris...the Less is More....but few words still give an expansive and disturbing scene...
Rage never wins.
j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob. I certainly agree with your words here. Rage does never .. read more
This is where less is more. Structure of 7/7/7/5 certainly creates some strong and quite disturbing imagery. I am left wondering who this unfortunate is and whether she deserved her fate and what was the cause of her extreme rage. Thought provoking piece.

Chris

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Christine. I appreciate your time and comments. Sometimes rage .. read more
Hi Doodley!
Rage and sin are old bedmates!

The 7-7-7-5 structure is used to perfection to tell the story of a woman who in bloodlust has killed her own purpose of existence. It is a common trait of angry people to forget their own follies, their own impurities when they spew curdled frothing foam from their scarlet mouths on others, but they forget that they are watched and nothing under the sun goes unnoticed. Retribution or karma is then swift, the immediate fallout being the utter annihilation and death of Eros or love in their lives. Symbolically then, she’ll live on as a corpse! Barren, bitter and unloved. For that is her very nature, what comes innately to her.

I shudder to think who you were thinking of when you wrote this darkly disturbing and powerful piece! Not me I hope...I’m a good girl :(

I am elated and delighted you posted a new write after such a long time. Can you please write another, happier one for me?

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Week Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. A very accurate interpretation of the poem. I couldn't h.. read more
DIVYA

1 Week Ago

It’s my pleasure to read you, it gives me a peak into that uniquely beautiful mind. Anything new i.. read more

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