Cast Thy Shadow

Cast Thy Shadow

A Poem by Doodley
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For 'Dee'.

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When light and dark conceive of grey,
To jade thy mind in blurred dismay,
Sink not into despairing sands,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

When thine own strength of steeling grace,
Dispels no frowns from thy own face,
Traverse not Sorrow's bridging spans,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

Should past regrets now linger near,
To quake thy soul in trembling fear,
Bow not thy head in sweating strands,
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

Then Icarus winged shall I soar,
To Heaven's Eye forevermore,
And bathe thee deep in sun drenched lands;
Just cast thy shadow 'pon my hands.

© 2018 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a simple French medieval styled Kyrielle.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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This poem leaves me with no words. Dee is a very lucky person. Such selfless love does not come every ones way, especially when packaged in a such an attractive persona and it must be pure bliss to cast them selves upon such a lovers hand. I know I couldn’t wait.

I always marvel at the depth of feelings you convey with such simplicity and clarity, adhering to the beauty of form and structure. A feat many (even me) can’t achieve even writing free verse. The opening verse has a very subtle, sublime feel, “Light and Dark conceive of Grey” to me is very symbolic. Those who have a proclivity to grey have so much light jostling with so much darkness in them! Very perceptive and insightful words there, Doodley!

The refrain reverberates, traversing a shadowy stretch, softly, lovingly insistent. Till her grey awning is pierced by the radiance of the sun within him. Till she surrenders and he absorbs her, all.

I’m so elated, the block is gone. The brilliance of your pen here says it all. You owe it to your readers to keep writing and sharing your gift with them.

P.S: The picture of the smaller hand in the larger one is very symbolic of the assurance, the expansiveness, the mutual reinforcement that embodies a solid, unshakable kind of love....

Kudos!

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Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Divya. I am glad you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate your ex.. read more
DIVYA

2 Months Ago

I wish you equally great things, dear Doodley. Here's wishing that your utterly giving and loving na.. read more



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Beautiful just beautiful, stunning poem

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

5 Days Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Simba. Very generous words. I appreciate them greatly. Welcome .. read more
This is such a thoughtful, considerate, beautiful poem. That gives such love, comfort and undying friendship. That can move mountains and heal someones broken soul let alone their spirit too.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Dawn. I appreciate your time and these very kind words.
Wow you are honestly such a wise and incredibly smart writer. You story tell beautifully and oh so eloquently. I can only dream of writing like you one day. The story line and structure is absolutely captivating. Keep up the incredible work.


Posted 1 Month Ago


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Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lola_Bee. Very generous words here. They are greatly appreciate.. read more
A perfect gem, well conceived and born out in classical grace and wit. You are an inspiration to us all. If I would change anything, it might be to alter a word in the line "Dispels..from thine own face." You dug deep for this one. Thank you.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bigfootprint. I appreciate your time and comments.
As Icarus, he is not afraid to soar in her love, unafraid to perish in her blinding incandescence. Seeking to slay the shadows that traverse her pale, overcast brows with his gentle hands...
I wish such a love was forever mine...

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Dhara_Ditzy Kat

1 Month Ago

Oh...I totally see your point (backs off. picks up her hat and gloves. Exits softly) :)))))))
Doodley

1 Month Ago

Closes the door behind her. Instructs two Dobermans to guard it. :)
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

1 Month Ago

ooooooooohhhhh nooooo..... ;((((((((
This is simple and pretty. I dig it :) check out my stuff if you get the chance to as well. I'll check out more of your work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, JB. I appreciate the time.
In the strength of two much can be achieved, held firmly in the palm of a loving caring hand never to leave you or desert you - promise pure and true- the arm is never too short or the grip too weak- in belief all is possible🌹

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kelly. I like your thoughts here. Extending a hand, taking on t.. read more
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Zoe
Most of us possess the ability to love, but to love without selfishness is where we fall short. It's such a fulfilling piece. Selflessness still exists.

Loved the poetic style, and the poetry of course. I'm just happy I got the mythological reference this time without sir Google's help :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. Your time and comments are always appreciated.
Zoe

1 Month Ago

Most welcome :)
Not overly complicated in form, perhaps, but what is there should not be ignored, and the depth of the message itself is rich, indeed. This whole work gleams brilliantly, and I'm sure much of it goes over my simple head. Even I felt the passing of an entire saga and saw vivid tapestries as I read. I've said it before, but I can't give you enough credit for your talent, my friend.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Clifford. Your thoughts on my poems are always appreciated. I h.. read more
Your shadow should be such that it should become god's shadow and halo should be seen from behind lol it was. a great poem and nice peñned

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jaskaran. I appreciate your time and kind words.

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Tags: Poem, life, melancholy, hope, kyrielle, love

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