Age is a funny thing

"Chloe!!" I remember my father yelling out from the entrance of my front door.

I'm running as fast as my small, 7 year old, hairy legs would let me go.

"Commiingg!!" I yell, as I huff and puff.

I remember thinking about how unfit I was.

 

"Chloe" my father yells, sounding angrier.

"IM COOMMMINNNNGG" I yell, annoyed as I run up the drive way, past my fathers old, small battered car and into the house to take off my muddy trainers.

 

My father growls as i accidently trodd mud all over the white tiles.
"Sorry" I say as I wince.

 

I remember he threatend to hit me, I gave him a smart response and I ran into my room, and hid under my bed until I was sure he wouldnt hit me - until i was sure that he may have forgotten about it.

 

I crawled out to pee and I was so wrong.

I was busting to go, and he hit me and all i remember from there is the feeling of pee running down my small, tired and hairy seven year old legs.

Reviews

[Glen's not so clean sla..]

Fantastic writing. Bravo lass

[MeathooksMcGee]

I wounded if you don't look back and kinda chuckle about it now. It was kind of a cute story except for the walloping. :)

[GingerCat]

Stories based on true experiences always carry just a little extra weight in my eyes. Even those negative, painful memories have their worth in regards to writing; it is heart-warming to see someone be strong enough to be able to transform something such as abuse into such a powerful story. Just mind your writing in places in regards to grammar, punctuation etc... these little things will really help to push your writing to the next level! All in all, a truly emotive piece.
Keep writing!
GingerCat

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Thankyou, Ginger cat! And yes, I know that i need to work on my grammar and such. I unfortunately get really lazy with grammar and punctuation

[Samuel Dickens]

How very sad, but if it's true, you've made yourself feel a little better by writing about it. I think the word is "cathartic". I've been doing the same thing for years, trying to disarm and make toothless those bad old memories.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I just feel that if its true, I can convey and show the emotion better. Even in my fiction writing, there's at least a little bit of truth in there, either experienced by myself or someone that i know, whom had that experience (with their permission of course)

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Thankyou so much for the review by the way! Ill be sure to review some of your works over the next few weeks!

[Woody]

I found this bitter sweet. I shouldn't laugh but I did, sorry.
a 7-year-old with hairy legs? is that true or are you making it up?
and then you spend some time under the bed and as soon as you crawl out, your dad hits you!
I pictured him sitting patiently on a chair waiting for you to come out. he sounds persistent and mean.

I hope I didn't upset you dear. I always see the funny side of things even in sad situation. see how deranged I am. that's what Dr. Seyn told me anyway.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Haha, well, when i was seven i had hairy legs :p
and when i was young, my dad was a tad mean, but then again i was mean to him as well as a child! Haha but, Woody, you didn't upset me. If i were going to be upset by a comment like that, i wouldn't have put this story up.
one good thing that's come out of having a mean father; you grew a thick skin real quick - well i did at least :p
thanks for the review, i always love your reviews :)

[Woody]

the pleasure is all mine Dear :)

[Arrow]

I feel extremely sad right now. All I wish to do is go back tot hat time and help you. Memories are what shape us.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I'm sorry i made you sad! D: but i agree on your statement about memories, they really do

[Sophy Freebirds]

Awww.. i really feel sorry about the seven year old :(.
. I liked the title.. with age we change, with age we control... nice write

~Sophy

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Thankyou, Sophy! :)

[Thomas]

i see there was some inspiration in our discussion. hah. i also thought of writing something after that

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Hahah yeah, it gave me some inspiration :) its also not finished... I just had to leave it where it is because i wrote it in the last few minutes of school and had to save it as the bell rang so i could frantically run to my driving instructors car and start my driving lesson :p

[Thomas]

i just realized you live in Australia...it was midnight here in ny when we were talking

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Haha why on earth would you be up so late?!