Love Her More

Love Her More

 

I’ll give to her

That

For me

You couldn't.

 

I’ll be to her

For me

That

You wouldn't.

 

I won’t do to her

That

To me

You shouldn’t.

 

I’m going to love her more.

 

Author's Note

I wrote this for my daughter. Short and to the point.
It's very meaningful to me but I'm not sure if that same sentiment is passed to the reader.
Constructive criticism, questions, feedback, always welcomed.

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

Incredibly meaningful! Without reading your authors note the sentiment of a mothers heart was strong. That's a wonderful quality to impart in your poetry. For lack of a better word the almost cryptic style adds to the mood but also gives it real poetic presence. Very nice. R x

[Drama Child]

Very much appreciated! Thank you R!

[Nancy A Halbert]

Love the sentiment. It could be interpreted the way written of other relationships other than mother and daughter. Like a man to an ex moving on to something better. Nicely universal. Suggestion add some symbolism or metaphor. I can relate to this poem easily

[Coyote Poetry]

Soft, gentle and wonderful words for your daughter. I really liked this poem. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Drama Child]

Many thanks as always Coyote! Always appreciated!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Poet.

[Too Poetic]

Wow this poem is really beautiful, short and sweet.
Thank you so much for sharing, it brought many emotions I thought I had forgotten.

Many thanks,
Too Poetic

[Drama Child]

Thank You for your very kind words Too Poetic! Much appreciated as always!

[Gee]

I really like this. Having been raised solely by my mum,(along with 6 siblings and then an adopted niece and nephew) I made a point of being to my own daughter, all that I would have wished a dad to be to me. She's a beautifully grounded 15 year old, ( only child) and the ORCHARD of my eye. Love her so,so much.

[Drama Child]

We seem to a few things in common. I am the 2nd eldest of 7, and my daughter is also 15, but not an only child (though, I currently think she'd prefer it). She has an adorable, 10 yr old brother to keep her on her toes. I too, have made a point of being a mother to them like I would have always liked to have. Thank you for reading my poem and commenting/sharing with me.

[Gee]

It is a pleadure

[Gee]

A pleasure , duh!!!!!!

[Paul Bell]

It sort of comes over as if you were abused, not necessarily sexual. But it did impact on your life.
So much so, you made the pact with yourself it would never happen to your kids.

[Drama Child]

Yes, you are spot on. Thank You for commenting!

[EvaThornburn]

Interesting write. A pleasure to read. Many emotions mixed in. Good Job. Eva

[Drama Child]

Thank You Eva! I appreciate your reviews!

[EvaThornburn]

Your welcome.