Unholy Cacophony

You know how I molest my caprice?

  the rackety touch of indecisiveness. 

  the husky stare of lies.

  the jaunty scream of unpredictability.

  the costly hearkening of anxiety.

  and the sore smell of indolence.

 

You know how I molest my caprice? 

  the rackety touch of thrill. 

  the husky stare of transparency.

  the jaunty scream of conviviality. 

  the costly hearkening of humor.

  and the sore smell of eloquence.

Reviews

[Jibey]

I have to admire the clever construction of this challenging poem. I like the gritty power of the words, their spitting insistence and teasing finger-pointing. The balanced verses serve to amplify the noise, calling out the behavioral negatives, assaulting the ear of the priest...poking him through the grill of the confessional..

Let's tango, shall we?

[moog-drika]

you pushed the meaning to the more depth of imagery and that made me take a dip in it.
I can sense the chaos from this interpretation which I sensed while writing the piece down. Thanks so much for reviewing it segment wise. Loved it!

And well, it takes two to tango, so...! :3

[Jibey]

I'm ready for the next challenge!

[Abhishek Asthana]

The poem is crafted so well and has an potency... A masterly piece always make impact in the world of writing... Really liked this interesting piece... Thanks for sharing !!

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for taking a ride to this write. It really means a lot. :D

[likhon]

Hmm....thrill seeker I guess. I think I am getting what you're trying to say. Maybe :v the way you immerse in your art is truly inspiring to me as a writer. Your bar is high ma'am. I'll try catchin' up :p

[moog-drika]

I dont even have any bar to set it high xD however, I guess it's your kindness that makes you say them :3
Thank you so much for your review! It means a lot :'D

[barleygirl]

This is a sign that you truly enjoy words. Clearly you've taken time to thoughtfully select each interesting & intriguing word that makes up the crux of each idea. I love the parallel construction. Most of all I love the originality (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

I love how beautifully you shared your thoughts on this piece. You actually understood my "behind the scene" of penning down this poem which is definitely interesting haha. Thank you so much. Your positive words help push me to explore more ideas and share them. *Hugs*

[Leslie Philibert]

Nice idea, with two questions being answered with a rich vocabulary, good work

[moog-drika]

I am still trying to find answers from the answer. Haha.
Thank you so much for all the positive words. I'm obliged!

[Bare trees]

You seem to describe a personality trait or possibly multiple personalities. I see a husband or boyfriend in the first stanza and a night out away from him in the second. Funny right?

[moog-drika]

hahahha you have all the freedom to bring any meaning out of it since I didn't add any.
I literally chuckled after reading your review and I can see the same. Haha
Thanks so much for such an interesting interpretation.
I guess it's the presence and absence of a husband or boyfriend that makes a big difference. :3

[wordman]

i liked it,a great play on words

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for this positivity. ^_^

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Chris Shaw]

This is a clever write and I did enjoy the contrast in your two stanzas. Your second stanza, I have to say sounds so much more fun. Hope all is good with you dear one.

Chris

[moog-drika]

I admit the second stanza has more of a few light elements. :3 but then again I'm glad that it made you enjoy the imagination. Thank you so much for the positive words and making my day.
I can now say that everything looks good to me! ^_^

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome. Have a good day