Real

 

Real

 

She takes her summer baton

And conducts a field of flowers-

                Black-eyed Susan, Queen Anne’s Lace-

The wind whips up the seeds and makes new

Every spare dandelion

Filling space, taking up the vacuum inside/outside.

 

Constant smell of dead skunk

A prayer composed/decomposed-

                To grant one day more-

Orion rides the night sky and

Captures the eyes wide in wonder

Of simple patterns gleaming blue.

 

And I feel real

All is real

All real

Real.

 

Hereafter/everafter/nevermore is overrated and the now is an underachiever

What stains is the past and all its intricate weaving-

                The loom assumes unions-

Time caps off the fallacy of who we are and

Who we are

Fails to appear out of the hat.

 

I am filled with Gnostic/nostrums, thoughts

Denying the body and blood coursing, careening –

                 Empty hands throwing punches-

Desperate slanted arguments of nothing

When something catches the eye

 

A portrait turns on an urn

The curator is suspicious of specious vases-

                Categories fall contaigious-

Vestiges veer off center leaving

A stick man in a hangman’s noose.

 

And I feel real

All is real

All real

Real.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Great stuff, like wathing a magician do his stuff. I like the refrain, which is like a calming bit of architectural scroll work. But the like that I think is great is 'Time caps off the fallacy of who we are'...and then you even weave in a crafty pun with 'hat'. Normally when I've read something strong like 'Clear' I find its still bossing my mind a couple of reads later. But that has not happened here. So I concluded I think this is the better of the two poems, at least for me. The use of deft little repeats clearly runs in the family!

[caitlin]

love the imagary

[W.k.kortas]

At turns playful and philosophical, its breezy pacing belies its weight. A first-rate piece of writing.

[FoolsGold23]

"Stick man in a hangman's noose", haha, I liked that line. This poem was chock full of whimsy and the dandylion fluff of daydreams with a nugget or two of profundity thrown in to make it truly interesting! I liked this, sort of a boundy, bouncy hard to follow in a way, but totally understandible in a non-sensible logic. I liked it. Great work!

[S.J.Floreen]

Oh, the descriptions and imagry in this is just so wonderful. It's truly magnificent what you have done with your words here.