A Strange Kind of Victory

A Strange Kind of Victory

A Poem by Sweet & Tender Hooligan
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Time defeats us all, there is no victory. Inspired by Morrissey & Bonnie Prince Billy.

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Defeated before the day as awoken,
I was happy alone but now all I want -
To disappear under my pillow.

Surrendering before tomorrow is asleep,
I wouldn't let you die there is no victory -
But time is dying all the time.

I'm frightened of not being afraid
You don't appreciate others until they're someone else's,
We don't understand unless its misunderstood.
We don't learn to love ourselves
You don't know what you got until it's gone,
I'm frightened of dreaming.

It's a strange form of jealousy,
That makes us old before you're an adult - 
Young till your dead, it takes time.

It's a strange form of inadequacy, 
That makes us save ourselves first -
God knows, I won't let the thought of a thought die.


© 2010 Sweet & Tender Hooligan



Author's Note

Sweet & Tender Hooligan
Think a Egon Schiele or Lucian Freud character in a Morrissey lyric.

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"But time is dieing all the time." Did you mean "dying"? Just a thought on grammar...
You used the words to create a wonderfully moderate flow. Your vocab really helps the tone of a sleepy "it's all right, I'm not too excited" way of saying that the speaker isn't overjoyed that he's had this strange victory. The movement of words helps with this, and I especially liked how you used...the same word x2 to get the point across...

"But time is dieing all the time."
"I'm frightened of not being afraid"
and one of my favorite lines,
"God knows, I won't let the thought of a thought die."
Great job. This is going in my library!
PBP

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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like this, well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love this, very muchly. I think I'll stay young as long as I can.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is stunning work love! Truly so!
I am blown away by this!
A great piece of work that leaves the reader reeling in thoughts! lol
Time can be the demon that suffocates us or the angel that releases us, I think we all battle with that - a brilliantly thought through poem!
xx

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think the title suits perfectly to the poem.
I like the 'controversy' within the lines, lol. Impressive.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good read i think though that you use a couple cliches that may be what you want to do though so keep it if thats what you like!!

Posted 7 Years Ago



Sometimes we tend to change without realizing....
and when we realize that, we would know that ourselves isn't ourselves anymore...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"But time is dieing all the time." Did you mean "dying"? Just a thought on grammar...
You used the words to create a wonderfully moderate flow. Your vocab really helps the tone of a sleepy "it's all right, I'm not too excited" way of saying that the speaker isn't overjoyed that he's had this strange victory. The movement of words helps with this, and I especially liked how you used...the same word x2 to get the point across...

"But time is dieing all the time."
"I'm frightened of not being afraid"
and one of my favorite lines,
"God knows, I won't let the thought of a thought die."
Great job. This is going in my library!
PBP

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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whoa. Nice! Sorry i can't think of anything more constructive to say... just - nice!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tags: life, love, thoughts, strange world, Lucian Freud, Egon Schiele, Morrissey, Bonnie Prince Billy, hard life, cruelty, despair, tiredness, fear, dreaming, longing, waiting

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Sweet & Tender Hooligan
Sweet & Tender Hooligan

Newport, South Wales, United Kingdom



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I'm Russell from Wales. I've been writing for many years. Writing is important to me and its my only reason for being on this site. I like to take my time on my poems and I hope to keep learning an.. more..

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