Victory

A political commentary on the war that I wrote a while back... I had it on my old account that is dead now.

 Victory to the one who loses,

 Bishop tells the king his lies.

 Maybe you're a martyr or 

 for whom the martyr cries

 

Fairy tails will lie to you,

Cinderella is not your friend.

If the slipper does not fit

you may still meet your dying end. 

 

The soldiers march two by two

into the arc of their own flood,

where the only wine that's left to drink

is the wine of their own blood.

 

Victory to the one who loses,

the queen supports her king,

so that after their engagement

they can share a tarnished ring.

 

The story is not finished

because the battle is not yet done,

the war that is not civil may last to the

end our red sun.

 

It's not the place of others to fight for what's not theirs,

for when the battle's over who will it be that cares?

No one will remember the day the towers fell,

only how the King corrupted it and made it his own hell.  

 

Reviews

[Jessica R.]

This is a great write, and I love the fact that you used a reference to Cinderella-- very original. Good job; you have talent, that's for certain.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Great write! War sux! Down with oppression and global arrogance!

-Gabe

[Ady]

Wonderful poem!

[Danielle Asher]

great piece. of all the political pieces I have read, I enjoy yours a lot because you tie it to something so real. The blood flowing from so many people loosing their lives, not just the fact that our president is an a*****e. Listening to false idols, false heroes who just send you into your death.
Thank you for sharing your work.

[Damian Alan Gray]

I loved the point being made in this, but I got lost near the end. I might suggest that you change the final stanza to accomodate the meter of the rest of the poem. Otherwise, it's a great read!

[mattavelli]

Another great one. :)