Freedom

The singer up there said he believed in Jesus,

it's not quite the same, but I do believe in this,

these moments are bliss.

The singer up there said he believed in someday,

he sand a song about life being washed away;

I can't stand another day.

Because I got love,

but I don't got freedom.

This is the part where my dreams come crashing down;

did you hear the sound

of another voice

singing "count your blessings,"

this is the part where my letters, I will send,

and I'll miss my friends.

You said to me, good luck on my journey,

don't cry at the end of another story;

your good faith ensures me,

that all of my wishes are in good intentions.

I'm gonna miss you as I leave this intersection;

this choice is your blessing.

Because I got love,

but I don't got freedom.

This is the part where my dreams come crashing down;

did you hear the sound

of another voice

singing "count your blessings,"

this is the part where my letters, I will send,

and I'll miss my friends.

Yet everything I want

is out of place;

this time I'll wait.

Yet everything I seek,

it makes me feel so weak;

no more time to waste.

Because I got love,

but I don't got freedom.

This is the part where my dreams come crashing down;

did you hear the sound

of another voice

singing "count your blessings,"

this is the part where my letters, I will send,

and I'll miss my friends.

Reviews

[Jared]

When one finds love at first it's hard to see the freedom in it but it's there, if you have someone you can talk to about anything, someone who understands what your going through, even if they don't understand but they try, you get to let someone else share your burden...there's a little freedom in everything if you know how to find it.
Great Poem, loved how it was written.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this poem. I thought it was nicely written. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Awdures]

Freedom is most definitely what you make it. I have two kids, a daytime job, a divorce paper and I'm free baby! It's all about those little moments you savour and carry about with you!! I really enjoyed this poem, and the repetitive theme of religion you had going through it.

[FlawedByDesign]

The idea of freedom, and whether we have it or not, can be argued to a point of exhaustion in my opinion. We are construed by the extents of the law not to mention the planet we live on, so what exactly is freedom??? I love when leaders of "certain" countries declare, "we fight for freedom" - lmao. Democracy is a way of willing and it might offer its people more choice, but not necessarily more freedom.

This poem comes across to me as a person going out into the world to possibly get a sense of "this freedom" (good luck finding it - lol) and saying goodbye.

Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Freedom is one of those funny words. Someone said "Freedom is when we have nothing left to lose." You took me in many direction with your words. A very interesting poem. Made me think.
Coyote