Tear-Soaked Words

Written in 8th grade.

I don’t want to love you,

it leaves me only pain.

While I see you so clearly,

I’m left with just a name,

and a photographic smile

of a soft spring day.

I gaze into your eyes while

you dream of a sweet friend,

a friend you call your world,

a friend you wish not to hurt,

a friend who saves a kiss for you

as you walk out the door.

Do you have to lie to her anymore?

The pain I saw within your eyes,

I’m left to wonder,

wonder why.

And I know you wouldn’t tell me,

because I’m not the one you confide,

but why don’t you give it a try?

I hand you my tear-soaked words,

which you just seem to look through.

I just wish you cared to know

all the pain I’ve been through,

and how I wish it mattered.

Reviews

[Ryan D. Mosley]

I love this. It is very moving and sad. A tragic poem of depression of a person who loved so much but didn't receive what she deserved. Overall: Great Job!

[Katie Lynn]

is this a letter? or I should say about a letter... no matter I love it

[MandarinOranges]

There are a very few poems out there that actually bring tears to my eyes...and this is one of them. i can't really say for sure why, other than it's beautiful and sad and so, so true to me right now. Thank you and keep up the good work!

[Conversing Empty Words]

I can relate with this one. Maybe not the strongest words and portraying your theme, but I could relate. And I like that. It's hard to get words out on their own, but to get them to mean something is something else. Keep working to perfect your vision.

[Troy Baham Jr.]

i could really relate to this one but in a bad way cuz the girl i'm with always makes me feel that i really don't care sometimes. i was really feeling this one. i could tell you put a lot into this one

[Memnoch]

I liked this !! It showed a lot of heart. I saw a few mistakes but nothing big. Keep up the great work.
Kelley Frost

[Amy]

You did a really good job of putting words to some hard emotions. I can really relate to the last three lines, but in kind of a different way. That is neither here nor there though, and I love the lines "While I see you so clearly I'm left with just a name". This brings SUCH a vivid image to mind it's crazy. Great job!

[Terrell]

WOW

[Wendy]

thats awesome

wowness

[Anthony J. M. Nelson]

A very moving and hertfelt piece. I actually felt pain in my chest while reading this. You explain yourself very well. Keep up your writing, i look forward to reading more