A moment of sharing

Watching someone from afar

Dark brown hair, hazel eyes, raspy voice

Speaks his truth for others to hear

Echoing sentiments heard 

Eye contact with a pause

Compassion seeps out

Understanding

From within

Sorrow

Leaves

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Sounds like a charismatic character for sure. I liked the way the lines were graduated. Good write. Lydi**

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

A moment of sharing.
Nice structure and layout.
Casts a vision.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you... :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[R.M.C]

Quite different from the forms of poetry I usually write in but I can see the allure of it. You've condensed something so complex and deep into a simple and direct description exceptionally well and I can respect and admire that. Looking at it, you seem to be writing the lines with a descending syllable count - I don't know if there's a name for that form of poetry - but if I'm correct (which I might not be since I've only started using syllable counts in my writing recently) your first and second lines have the same syllables count - of 9... just thought I'd mention it, though you may even not be bothered about the syllable count... in which case it would be quite a coincidence :)

[EileenMarie]

Thank you. It's called a Nonnet. It's 9 lines 9 syllables to 1. Leaves is only 1 syllable actually. I enjoy this style. I'm glad you liked it :)

[R.M.C]

Well, I've learnt another form of poetry - I'll be sure to give it a little go... just so I'm clear, I didn't mention 'Leaves' - I know that has one syllable :) I was referring to the first two lines:
Dark brown hair, hazel eyes, raspy voice
Speaking his truth for others to hear...

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! You are correct!! I will go fix. I appreciate you pointing it out :)

[R.M.C]

you're welcome; its easy to make mistakes with syllable count, especially when caught up in the process of turning an idea into a physical poem - I know I have made countless mistakes... :)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Intact. Beautiful and exasperating. I always love inner conflicts. Analytic and Auto responsive writing. Always puts someone to think. Reflective, that's the word I'm looking for.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!

[Jennie Baron]

Sorry to get back to you so late. I've been busy and remiss on keeping up with my RRs. I do so love this poem, though. Sometimes less is more, and that's true in this case. The reader's imagination can make it almost anything! Very nice work.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you. I appreciate your review. I write short poems as I find I can say a lot with little words better than vise versa :)

[emmajoy]

You write with your heart, beckoning followers to read then, stroke your words rather than just read them. Compassion and love in one person is so very precious.. grab hold, keep close.

' Compassion seeps out - Understanding - From within - Sorrow - Leaves.. '

[EileenMarie]

Thank you so much for your review :)

[Alexandra Hounschell]

Ah.. What a soothing piece. I really enjoyed this!

[EileenMarie]

I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the review.

[MAC]

oh, do love this piece! have spent most of my life watching from afar....does well for poetry but not so to elevate loneliness. an excellent write :)

[MAC]

just noticed that you have lots of views but only my review. silly people, will send out read requests for this.

[EileenMarie]

Thank tou!! Writing soothes me soul & I love getting feedback. Motivates me to keep writing!!
Over to yours now 😊