Night becomes day

The sun rises to begin the day

The sun rose above the GYPSY Mountain RIDGE peaks

Allowing FRUIT of MANGO color to replace RESIDUAL darkness

Peering thru the ARMY of sparse clouds showing RELATIONS to the blue sky streaks 

The sun rose above the GYPSY mountain RIDGE peaks

As the birds played their internal HARPS 

KINDNESS of day awaits the eager beings starting NECESSARY rituals

The sun rose above the GYPSY mountain RIDGE peaks

Allowing FRUIT of MANGO color replacing RESIDUAL darkness

Reviews

[Wesley Dingler]

Good evening, Eileen.
Short though it is, this is a wonderful poem.
It offers so much life and color, in such a small package, that it took me by surprise.

Thank you for sharing it.

[Pete]

Very beautiful and refreshing. Uplifting. "As the birds played their internal HARPS" - great line. The repetition adds to the effectiveness. Enjoyed this very much.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! It was for a contest. It makes me work hard finding how to express myself. I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Nessly]

Your description of a new day, new beginning is beautiful. Your repetition adds to your piece by reiterating a new day approaching. I love it!

[EileenMarie]

I enter a lot of contests on here which challenge me in new writing styles!
Thanks for reading & your review. Glad you liked it!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

What a great job! You do form so well! Beautiful.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you :)

[angelina neves]

"Allowing FRUIT of MANGO color replacing RESIDUAL darkness" beautiful creative image!

[EileenMarie]

Thank you. I had fun writing this poem :)

[Helena]

Very creative use of the "10". I loved the interesting format of this......was it written in a particular style? Anyway it was great, and I liked. Thanks for joining in the contest!

~Helena ~

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! Well as I reviewed it I realized I made a couple mistakes of what was supposed to be a Triolet. I've since made the correction. Thanks again 😊

[Helena]

Most welcome! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this piece. not so much the capitalization, i think the lines and words speak loudly enough on their own...the repetition works well to echo the sentiment of a new day, of new life...

j.

[EileenMarie]

I wrote this for a contest in which I had to use the 10 words in capital letters :) The format is a triolet. I found this style best to be able to use the words and make sense out of what I was saying.
Thanks for your review.